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Split · 12-09-2013, 07:43 PM

Idk what you're talking about. I liked the spinning in waves section.

I feel like your sentences ran on way too much and often for no reason. I also don't think your style works well with paragraphs, I agree with dead man. Or maybe, your style just works a lot better in shortbar

You should take a couple pieces and practice saying as much as you can in as few words as possible. Maybe try not using a rhyme more than two or three times.

Maybe make your schemes a little less binary.

This sort of free write is good for you tho

Keep elevating

12-09-2013, 07:43 PM	#3
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	Idk what you're talking about. I liked the spinning in waves section. I feel like your sentences ran on way too much and often for no reason. I also don't think your style works well with paragraphs, I agree with dead man. Or maybe, your style just works a lot better in shortbar You should take a couple pieces and practice saying as much as you can in as few words as possible. Maybe try not using a rhyme more than two or three times. Maybe make your schemes a little less binary. This sort of free write is good for you tho Keep elevating __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com