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12-05-2013, 07:33 AM
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kind of bland in its scope and lyrical delivery. no quotes "popped" out at me. I liked how you weren't verbose. Refreshing. You should have come out and said something though.
Good rhymes but it didn't seem very challenging for you. I think the two opening bars was the strongest thematically, mechanically, rhythmically. Keep writing.
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