Who all on Netcees can write something using this scheme? - Page 2

Certain · 11-28-2013, 01:57 PM

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Originally Posted by Pent uP

I did a 64 line verse with a different scheme but it came out nowhere as good as that...I could possibly do that now. ..maybe for my next open mic hmhmhmh

The same eight-syllable rhyme with no filler?

Certain · 11-28-2013, 01:57 PM

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Originally Posted by Split Eight

^sounds like a souless cakebrah

-_-

PancakeBrah · 11-28-2013, 01:59 PM

That was impressive. I do hate the use of the same scheme throughout an entire verse with the rhymes so clustered together, though. But you can't deny the technical prowess. Needs a little more room to breathe.

Split · 11-28-2013, 02:00 PM

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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah

Chance the Rapper is too good, bros.

have you looked through his "featured on" tracks yet?

Specifically with Lorine Chia and "Such a Thing" by Legit and also "Out the Water"

PancakeBrah · 11-28-2013, 02:02 PM

No I'll have to check it out. He's far and away my favorite rapper nowadays. His listenability, lyricism, and thoughts are all top notch.

Pent uP · 11-28-2013, 02:04 PM

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Originally Posted by Certain

The same eight-syllable rhyme with no filler?

No it was less syllables. But I did multiple muktis a line...it was a weird concept..kinda countinf my life back... lotta repetitive beginning (not part of the rhymes). Not really that proud of it. I could do it now pretty well I think. Dunno about rikos level tho. We'll see

Certain · 11-28-2013, 02:06 PM

He wrote it because he could. (I'd say "can," but I have no idea if he still is alive.) And we can't. It's not like everything he wrote was like this, though he definitely had the ZYG/namix-like detachment issue with his writing.

Split · 11-28-2013, 02:07 PM

I could write something like that. I prefer imperfection. It's endearing.

Split · 11-28-2013, 02:07 PM

it was really good, though.

Certain · 11-28-2013, 02:08 PM

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Originally Posted by Split Eight

I could write something like that. I prefer imperfection. It's endearing.

-_-

PancakeBrah · 11-28-2013, 02:10 PM

Elitist Certain is my least favorite Certain :-(

Pent uP · 11-28-2013, 02:11 PM

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Originally Posted by Certain

He wrote it because he could. (I'd say "can," but I have no idea if he still is alive.) And we can't. It's not like everything he wrote was like this, though he definitely had the ZYG/namix-like detachment issue with his writing.

He wrote it because he was a perfectionist. At the time he thought he had written 6 perfect verses only to come back and criticize himself as being much worse in hindsight. I spoke a lot with him. Even after he stopped boarding we emailed eachother and kept up. And I stand by the fact I can write a verse like that

Split · 11-28-2013, 02:13 PM

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Originally Posted by Pent uP

And I stand by the fact I can write a verse like that

do et fagit

Certain · 11-28-2013, 02:16 PM

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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah

Elitist Certain is my least favorite Certain :-(

I'm not even being elitist. I couldn't write anything close to that. Pent uP probably could write something similar, but I have my doubts as to whether every sentence will hold up grammatically and logically the way that does.

The elitist here is Split Eight, being all dismissive.

Pent uP · 11-28-2013, 02:17 PM

I got a verse to finish that I intend to post before the end of the month for om hoping itll get some nods

And then ill dwell on a topic for that

Split · 11-28-2013, 02:19 PM

don't vilify me. i'm just saying i don't paint by numbered rhyme schemes.

i recognize the skill and attention to detail that went into that sort of thing. i was just noting that 'lyrical perfection' isn't really relevant to topicals/ OMs anymore.

Split · 11-28-2013, 02:20 PM

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Originally Posted by Pent uP

I got a verse to finish that I intend to post before the end of the month for om hoping itll get some nods

And then ill dwell on a topic for that

cool. why don't you collab with people? your topicals are enjoyable (particularly that bus-demon one) but you don't seem to write too often

Pent uP · 11-28-2013, 02:20 PM

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Originally Posted by Split Eight

don't vilify me. i'm just saying i don't paint by numbered rhyme schemes.

i recognize the skill and attention to detail that went into that sort of thing. i was just noting that 'lyrical perfection' isn't really relevant to topicals/ OMs anymore.

Strangely. I agree

PancakeBrah · 11-28-2013, 02:22 PM

Me and Pent had a possible collab in the works then he decided to be the reclusive writer, holed up in an attic with thousands of crumpled up papers, with no time for such frivolities like a Pancakebrother.

Certain · 11-28-2013, 02:23 PM

I also agree.

But the entire point of me posting that verse here (and the entire point of this thread) was about the rhyme scheme.

11-28-2013, 01:59 PM	#23
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	That was impressive. I do hate the use of the same scheme throughout an entire verse with the rhymes so clustered together, though. But you can't deny the technical prowess. Needs a little more room to breathe. __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

11-28-2013, 02:02 PM	#25
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	No I'll have to check it out. He's far and away my favorite rapper nowadays. His listenability, lyricism, and thoughts are all top notch. __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

11-28-2013, 02:06 PM	#27
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	He wrote it because he could. (I'd say "can," but I have no idea if he still is alive.) And we can't. It's not like everything he wrote was like this, though he definitely had the ZYG/namix-like detachment issue with his writing. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

11-28-2013, 02:07 PM	#28
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	I could write something like that. I prefer imperfection. It's endearing. __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

11-28-2013, 02:07 PM	#29
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	it was really good, though. __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

11-28-2013, 02:10 PM	#31
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	Elitist Certain is my least favorite Certain :-( __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

11-28-2013, 02:17 PM	#35
Pent uP Robin Williams of Fallen Victims Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 1,499 Battle Record: 25-11 Accomplishments - NC Hall of Fame Champed - Netcees Writers League (2x) - NWL Season 1 - Write Night I - Art of Writing League (2x) - Write Week IV Rep Power: 6862275	I got a verse to finish that I intend to post before the end of the month for om hoping itll get some nods And then ill dwell on a topic for that

11-28-2013, 02:19 PM	#36
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	don't vilify me. i'm just saying i don't paint by numbered rhyme schemes. i recognize the skill and attention to detail that went into that sort of thing. i was just noting that 'lyrical perfection' isn't really relevant to topicals/ OMs anymore. __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

11-28-2013, 02:22 PM	#39
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	Me and Pent had a possible collab in the works then he decided to be the reclusive writer, holed up in an attic with thousands of crumpled up papers, with no time for such frivolities like a Pancakebrother. __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

11-28-2013, 02:23 PM	#40
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	I also agree. But the entire point of me posting that verse here (and the entire point of this thread) was about the rhyme scheme. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.