02-13-2013, 08:54 PM | #1 |
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Utmost vs. Malachi {Malachi wins}
Round 1 Rules Due Dates: Verses are due Wednesday, February 20th 2013 11:59 PM PST. Voting ends Saturday 11:59 PM PST. (Battles that lack votes may close later.) (One sided battles may get closed early.) (Extensions can be no longer than 36 hours and have to be granted by your opponent.) Line Limit: Min. = 10 lines Max. = 16 lines (The max. can be higher if different is agreed upon by both.) Voting: Must vote on 5 battles and post your links. Post the links in the thread titled "Round 1 Voting Links". You will be punished if you don't post all 5 voting links. You will not like the punishment, so just vote so you don't have to cry later. General Rules: 1st person can't edit after the 2nd person posts. 2nd person can't edit after a vote has been made. Feeding = DQ. Recycling = DQ. Biting = DQ. No freeposting, swaying or bitching. Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in. If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post MUST match the 1st person's line amount. @Utmost @Malachi |
02-13-2013, 09:04 PM | #2 |
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check check check
How bout 12 lines Utmost?
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02-14-2013, 12:45 AM | #3 |
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12 is good
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02-19-2013, 08:38 PM | #4 |
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I need an ext, is that good with you bro
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02-20-2013, 08:22 PM | #5 |
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thats cool
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02-22-2013, 12:30 AM | #6 |
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sent 12
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02-22-2013, 12:34 AM | #7 |
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Yo I leave this nigga black on both sides, his rhymes a waste of breath
You ain't a hip hop legend, but everyone reading your drops thinks mos deaf Im taking it back to the basics, no ill nikas here you ass How can you be the future of text if you cant even beat its past Speaking of B2B were you out of your damn mind UT, I. have to tell you THAT WP didn't make any sense in your line If you getting any fame your lucky dumbass fag The only time UT was considered a star was on the US flag I knew your text isnt going in the right direction But who thought itd be bad enough to keep namix from the tutor section Your against the prophet, to beat him you need magic You couldn't get Prop unless we're talking bout no.17, you faggot
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02-22-2013, 08:17 AM | #8 |
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Utmost's Verse
http://artofbattling.com/forum/showt...cally-sleeping I'll weed out da weak ina sec, ur group is done, understood scrub & it Stems from the fact, That rasta is soooo far from Good, Bud.. Punish this creeps eye, coz 1 mean right and its dreamtime u'll get sent to bed, NO dessert!.. & ur mom'll get sent with a creampie but if you DID get a meal, ud foam at the mouth n' HAVE to see it Coz eviction left Mal, content.. that his new home had plenty of packing peanuts & No doubt i'll bomb this twerp, u WISH u had a palm to burst U finger bang cuz YOU like to pose.. I fingerbang that sex pistol of a mom of urs YOU betta get vocal, yell for help or scream the lords name n' pray Coz to win here, Ur gonna need Hush to break silence & God to be ya saving grace Plus...with chicks Ima pro; kid you neva get the digits to boast They greet Me with a "Sugar, Hi"....while your greeted with a ritalin dose . . boom |
02-22-2013, 09:10 AM | #9 |
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Yo I leave this nigga black on both sides, his rhymes a waste of breath
You ain't a hip hop legend, but everyone reading your drops thinks mos deaf Fam I really want to like this but im not sure what your trying to do, I think I know, but if thats the case it could of been worded a hell lot better. so sorry about that but im going to have skip by this bad boy Im taking it back to the basics, no ill nikas here you ass How can you be the future of text if you cant even beat its past lol liked this Speaking of B2B were you out of your damn mind UT, I. have to tell you THAT WP didn't make any sense in your line ok If you getting any fame your lucky dumbass fag The only time UT was considered a star was on the US flag mmmm...no I knew your text isnt going in the right direction But who thought itd be bad enough to keep namix from the tutor section Ok I see where your going with it, even if i dont agree with the facts Your against the prophet, to beat him you need magic You couldn't get Prop unless we're talking bout no.17, you faggot ok VS I'll weed out da weak ina sec, ur group is done, understood scrub & it Stems from the fact, That rasta is soooo far from Good, Bud.. not feeling this Punish this creeps eye, coz 1 mean right and its dreamtime u'll get sent to bed, NO dessert!.. & ur mom'll get sent with a creampie not feeling this either but if you DID get a meal, ud foam at the mouth n' HAVE to see it Coz eviction left Mal, content.. that his new home had plenty of packing peanuts ... & No doubt i'll bomb this twerp, u WISH u had a palm to burst U finger bang cuz YOU like to pose.. I fingerbang that sex pistol of a mom of urs better YOU betta get vocal, yell for help or scream the lords name n' pray Coz to win here, Ur gonna need Hush to break silence & God to be ya saving grace ok Plus...with chicks Ima pro; kid you neva get the digits to boast They greet Me with a "Sugar, Hi"....while your greeted with a ritalin dose mm not sure if this was an attempt at a personal. For me this was an awkward one. Not sure if there were some personals in here i may have missed.. But going from the hits i did see and the attempts that for me were missed. I going to have to go with Malachi. V/Malachi |
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I guess I would break it down to US flag Pretty clean all things considered, wording could've been harsher but the concept behind it was pretty nice Prop 17 pretty funny, well worded. I basically thought of it as a generic since it was your own name being flipped vs Saving Grace Pretty well thought out, easily strongest line of your verse and lotb contender Sugar hi/Mal content The two were both almosts to me... Nice concepts that just didn't really connect, either thanks to the construction of the bar or a lack of relating to the WP to the punch This was pretty close, but it did end up 2-1 in quotes so I edge it to Malachi. Probably would've given it to Utmost if Sugar hi or Mal content was a little cleaner, but they ended up leaving some to be desired. Nice battle guys. V/ Malachi |
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02-22-2013, 03:26 PM | #11 | ||
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This was pretty close.
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These 2 was about equal, but Malachai started and closed better. v/Malachai. |
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02-23-2013, 02:08 PM | #12 |
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Malachi - I really wasnt feeling much other than the namix line and MAYBE the future of text just cause it was funny. I can see your improvement, but what you need to focus on is a combination of wording your punches/setups to make them more direct and also to try to expand the types of creative lines you make. Try something outside of your comfort zone. Try a complicated wordplay or a good metaphore or simile. Even if it doesnt work, you'll be better for it.
Utmost - You have a more creative approach here, but there is some tweaking needed as well. Your wording is a bit bland at times, but the concepts are there. I enjoyed the creampie line, lol'd at the Hush and God line and even the sugar high line wasnt too bad. Now what you need to focus on is the wording and maybe try to think more outside the box to get those crazy concepts noone has seen before. Vote - I'm going to have to go the other way and vote Utmost
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Yo I leave this nigga black on both sides, his rhymes a waste of breath
You ain't a hip hop legend, but everyone reading your drops thinks mos deaf not sure where you were going with this...writing/deaf doesnt coincide Im taking it back to the basics, no ill nikas here you ass How can you be the future of text if you cant even beat its past ehh, this was a miss...weak Speaking of B2B were you out of your damn mind UT, I. have to tell you THAT WP didn't make any sense in your line ok flip, i guess If you getting any fame your lucky dumbass fag The only time UT was considered a star was on the US flag ??? I knew your text isnt going in the right direction But who thought itd be bad enough to keep namix from the tutor section lol ouch Your against the prophet, to beat him you need magic You couldn't get Prop unless we're talking bout no.17, you faggot nah vs I'll weed out da weak ina sec, ur group is done, understood scrub & it Stems from the fact, That rasta is soooo far from Good, Bud.. bud smoker, so im feeling this Punish this creeps eye, coz 1 mean right and its dreamtime u'll get sent to bed, NO dessert!.. & ur mom'll get sent with a creampie lol funny but if you DID get a meal, ud foam at the mouth n' HAVE to see it Coz eviction left Mal, content.. that his new home had plenty of packing peanuts lol ehh... & No doubt i'll bomb this twerp, u WISH u had a palm to burst U finger bang cuz YOU like to pose.. I fingerbang that sex pistol of a mom of urs lol ouch YOU betta get vocal, yell for help or scream the lords name n' pray Coz to win here, Ur gonna need Hush to break silence & God to be ya saving grace K.O. Plus...with chicks Ima pro; kid you neva get the digits to boast They greet Me with a "Sugar, Hi"....while your greeted with a ritalin dose niice this was one sided. malachi has mad potential, he just has to work on making his punches more witty, so they will hit harder..utmost, killed this wit nice lines throughout had a definite K.O. with the "hush" "saving grace" line. vote: utmost
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but if you DID get a meal, ud foam at the mouth n' HAVE to see it
Coz eviction left Mal, content.. that his new home had plenty of packing peanuts YOU betta get vocal, yell for help or scream the lords name n' pray Coz to win here, Ur gonna need Hush to break silence & God to be ya saving grace vs. Speaking of B2B were you out of your damn mind UT, I. have to tell you THAT WP didn't make any sense in your line If you getting any fame your lucky dumbass fag The only time UT was considered a star was on the US flag Your against the prophet, to beat him you need magic You couldn't get Prop unless we're talking bout no.17, you faggot This was an okay battle. I have to give it to Malachi because he has one more quote. V/Malachi
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Mal was consistent, although his first 2 lines missed. Every other punch was pretty cleanly executed, no real haymakers but a steady flow of jabs. Quotes are 3-3, and if Mal content had been just a tad better I would give this to utmost. As it stands tho, MVGT Mal |
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Didn't really feel either of the battlers verses. Seemed kinda generic ''I'm better than you and you suck because''-shit. There were moments in both of the particpants verses that I did like a little bit tho', the ''only time you'd be considered a star, US flag'' shit was allright I guess, and the ''Sugar, Hi .. Ritalin dose''-line was allright.
It was a close battle, for sure. And it's hard to pick a winner since both of you had about the same ammount of weaknesses and strengths. Because of that it boils down to creativity for me and I think Utmost edges is there. MVGT: Utmost. |
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