Week 8 - YDK (3-4) vs. King Ra. (1-4) - KING RA. WINS 5-0

Certain · 11-15-2013, 01:54 AM

YDK: I'm getting the impression you've entered the don't-give-a-fuck stage of being in this league, which is a damn shame. This verse was loaded with cliches and not good. The flow and mechanics were sloppy. The connection to the topic was rather flimsy. Even the emotion seemed sugar-coated. I did not enjoy anything about this verse. I hope you're as happy with life as you come across in it, though.

King Ra.: I imagined Ghostface Killah first, then GZA, then Inspectah Deck. I am not sure why I decided those would be the natural fits. I came into this week with a predisposition against any verses referencing the Wu-Tang Clan or the specific songs, but you pulled it off because you went all-in on a bunch of aspects of the Clan. The verse wasn't great. The story didn't go anywhere particularly interesting, instead so heavily focused on the concept. And there were no points of exceptional lyricism or word choice. But it was a cool approach as far as taking Wu-Tang week literally. This is the second time in this league you've approached a topic by writing about a murderous female martial artist, and the other time also was your only other win. You certainly did enough here.

Vote: King Ra.

11-15-2013, 01:54 AM	#7
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	YDK: I'm getting the impression you've entered the don't-give-a-fuck stage of being in this league, which is a damn shame. This verse was loaded with cliches and not good. The flow and mechanics were sloppy. The connection to the topic was rather flimsy. Even the emotion seemed sugar-coated. I did not enjoy anything about this verse. I hope you're as happy with life as you come across in it, though. King Ra.: I imagined Ghostface Killah first, then GZA, then Inspectah Deck. I am not sure why I decided those would be the natural fits. I came into this week with a predisposition against any verses referencing the Wu-Tang Clan or the specific songs, but you pulled it off because you went all-in on a bunch of aspects of the Clan. The verse wasn't great. The story didn't go anywhere particularly interesting, instead so heavily focused on the concept. And there were no points of exceptional lyricism or word choice. But it was a cool approach as far as taking Wu-Tang week literally. This is the second time in this league you've approached a topic by writing about a murderous female martial artist, and the other time also was your only other win. You certainly did enough here. Vote: King Ra. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws. Last edited by Certain; 11-15-2013 at 11:36 AM. Reason: Cleaning up punctuation.