Week 7 - Vividlyvague (4-2) vs. patrown (3-2) - VIVIDLYVAGUE WINS 6-0

breathless · 11-10-2013, 06:01 PM

Man, this was sort of tough to decide on the vote part, but, I think what sealed it was the relation to the picture

Vag, you did a real nice job on the direct narration of the scenario, both side of it, with thoughts and actions from either one, you made it so if someone didn't know the history they could still get the jist of it. Your wordplay and unorthodox rhyming were pleasing, but, at times it seemed to kill the overall flow of it. You embodied a perspective of the times, gave a really distinct hippie vs military vibe with overtones of both not sure if what they were doing was right, but going with it because that is what they trained to be

Pat, as a standalone piece I liked this more, but the abstract take on the photo was hard to understand, still not exactly sure if I got it... More of the beta-male college boy's progression to the event where he gotshot and then the kid's take taking the lawsuit money and dipping on his family... I think? But, mechanics and flow wise this was killing it throughout, but even with that I feel the abstract take was a little too abstract

Vote - Vag

11-10-2013, 06:01 PM	#6
breathless Master of Beastiality Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: Lansing, Mi Posts: 368 Battle Record: 4-6 Rep Power: 0	Man, this was sort of tough to decide on the vote part, but, I think what sealed it was the relation to the picture Vag, you did a real nice job on the direct narration of the scenario, both side of it, with thoughts and actions from either one, you made it so if someone didn't know the history they could still get the jist of it. Your wordplay and unorthodox rhyming were pleasing, but, at times it seemed to kill the overall flow of it. You embodied a perspective of the times, gave a really distinct hippie vs military vibe with overtones of both not sure if what they were doing was right, but going with it because that is what they trained to be Pat, as a standalone piece I liked this more, but the abstract take on the photo was hard to understand, still not exactly sure if I got it... More of the beta-male college boy's progression to the event where he gotshot and then the kid's take taking the lawsuit money and dipping on his family... I think? But, mechanics and flow wise this was killing it throughout, but even with that I feel the abstract take was a little too abstract Vote - Vag __________________ I used to be amazing... http://soundcloud.com/dancourser/sets