Week 7 - symetrik (2-1) vs. ThisIsDam (0-0) - THISISDAM WINS 7-4

Vulgar · 11-09-2013, 02:16 PM

symetrik - I like how you used the picture. The story rung of a father's melancholy, and it was spruced with flashback memory fibers that worked. Not a "full meal" type of verse if that makes sense. You seem to enjoy offering photographs rather than albums. Overall, it was cool.

DAM - Welcome back, D. You are 80% rusty, I think, but this was a step above what I expected to read from you on your first topical back. I thought it came through successfully. Nice integration of the picture into key areas of the piece, cool tempo, experienced writing, and a satisfying closer. Good work.

Vote - DAM

11-09-2013, 02:16 PM	#1
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	symetrik - I like how you used the picture. The story rung of a father's melancholy, and it was spruced with flashback memory fibers that worked. Not a "full meal" type of verse if that makes sense. You seem to enjoy offering photographs rather than albums. Overall, it was cool. DAM - Welcome back, D. You are 80% rusty, I think, but this was a step above what I expected to read from you on your first topical back. I thought it came through successfully. Nice integration of the picture into key areas of the piece, cool tempo, experienced writing, and a satisfying closer. Good work. Vote - DAM