Week 7 - Vulgar (3-1) vs. Pancakebrah (3-1) - PANCAKEBRAH WINS 8-1

timeless · 11-07-2013, 11:43 PM

pancakes verse had a lot of choppy parts to it but it definitely had me connecting to the photo a lot more then vulgar did.

'Marlon walked as a bundle of tics. Bumbling. He fumbled with wit.
His tongue unequipped for quips and hand unfit with stumbling writ.'
best bar by far, I like how you took the approach from the photographers perspective, shit was interesting. Out of curiousity, Have you seen this photo before? or looked it up? never heard of john white.

And it’s a Pulitzer for John H. White, for the still that he’d get
of two people who had never met,
aside from a cigarette, a neighborhood, and skin that’s tinted.
For a newspaper that probably wouldn’t waste the text to have their obits printed.
Loved the ending.

led where the peregrine drinks, bipolar Rameses in a goblet
couldn't walk out the door, damn knees full of cobwebs
Behold Copper Rah, the powers of a chockfull of flesh
rarely forgetting the time with a cuckoo clock on his chest
shimmered Ca'ba's on decks, mottled opera was mesh
The streets of Osaka were wet - tongue dry, no habla ingles
vulgar, your verse was dope but it seemed like you wrote 75% of this without even seeing the topic first. it took awhile for me to catch on. lots of creative wordplay, just not a direct delivery.

vote = pancake

11-07-2013, 11:43 PM	#4
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	pancakes verse had a lot of choppy parts to it but it definitely had me connecting to the photo a lot more then vulgar did. 'Marlon walked as a bundle of tics. Bumbling. He fumbled with wit. His tongue unequipped for quips and hand unfit with stumbling writ.' best bar by far, I like how you took the approach from the photographers perspective, shit was interesting. Out of curiousity, Have you seen this photo before? or looked it up? never heard of john white. And it’s a Pulitzer for John H. White, for the still that he’d get of two people who had never met, aside from a cigarette, a neighborhood, and skin that’s tinted. For a newspaper that probably wouldn’t waste the text to have their obits printed. Loved the ending. led where the peregrine drinks, bipolar Rameses in a goblet couldn't walk out the door, damn knees full of cobwebs Behold Copper Rah, the powers of a chockfull of flesh rarely forgetting the time with a cuckoo clock on his chest shimmered Ca'ba's on decks, mottled opera was mesh The streets of Osaka were wet - tongue dry, no habla ingles vulgar, your verse was dope but it seemed like you wrote 75% of this without even seeing the topic first. it took awhile for me to catch on. lots of creative wordplay, just not a direct delivery. vote = pancake