Week 5 - Mike Wrecka (1-3) vs. Adonis (2-1) - MIKE WRECKA WINS 7-6

Zen · 10-25-2013, 06:38 PM

Adonis- Just last week I said I've never been disappointed in one of your verses before, but I don't know about this one. Allot of your rhymes were forced to me. poems/form/pond/alarm and twinge/sacrament lines really stuck out to me. Forcing them like that really fucked with the flow and starting this piece off with those first few lines really fucked up the whole piece in my opinion. The content was pretty dope. Felt like it coulda been written to the sun topic last week in my battle. Overall, I was expecting much more but I just feel a little let down by this piece.

Mike- This was pretty dope. I liked it. The flow of this was very good especially in the first few opening lines and that set the tempo nicely for the rest of the verse. I felt it fell off in a few lines but it picked up shortly thereafter so it wasn't much of a problem. Concept wise this was pretty original and the ending was a dayum moment. I figured the volcano would erupt and kill them, but the last line settled the verse perfectly. Very nice.

V/ Mike

10-25-2013, 06:38 PM	#4
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Adonis- Just last week I said I've never been disappointed in one of your verses before, but I don't know about this one. Allot of your rhymes were forced to me. poems/form/pond/alarm and twinge/sacrament lines really stuck out to me. Forcing them like that really fucked with the flow and starting this piece off with those first few lines really fucked up the whole piece in my opinion. The content was pretty dope. Felt like it coulda been written to the sun topic last week in my battle. Overall, I was expecting much more but I just feel a little let down by this piece. Mike- This was pretty dope. I liked it. The flow of this was very good especially in the first few opening lines and that set the tempo nicely for the rest of the verse. I felt it fell off in a few lines but it picked up shortly thereafter so it wasn't much of a problem. Concept wise this was pretty original and the ending was a dayum moment. I figured the volcano would erupt and kill them, but the last line settled the verse perfectly. Very nice. V/ Mike