Week 4 - Clutter Buck (1-0) vs. Adonis (1-1) - ADONIS WINS 8-6

breathless · 10-20-2013, 11:30 PM

Vote - Clutter

Adonis, there were so many spots where a simple switching of word order would've improved not only the multies, but the cadence as well, expressed syllables out of place and such, storywise though it was really nice, actually captivating in the tale, but not so perfect in the lyricality

Clutter, dude, I imagined a middle aged black chick wearing clanky bangles reciting this defpoetry style in a dank room, shit was literally flawless lyrically but aside from that somewhat lacking, but shit was so clean though...

10-20-2013, 11:30 PM	#1
breathless Master of Beastiality Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: Lansing, Mi Posts: 368 Battle Record: 4-6 Rep Power: 0	Vote - Clutter Adonis, there were so many spots where a simple switching of word order would've improved not only the multies, but the cadence as well, expressed syllables out of place and such, storywise though it was really nice, actually captivating in the tale, but not so perfect in the lyricality Clutter, dude, I imagined a middle aged black chick wearing clanky bangles reciting this defpoetry style in a dank room, shit was literally flawless lyrically but aside from that somewhat lacking, but shit was so clean though... __________________ I used to be amazing... http://soundcloud.com/dancourser/sets