Week 4 - symetrik (0-0) vs. breathless (0-2) - BREATHLESS WINS 6-2

e11even · 10-15-2013, 01:18 PM

This battle was cool. Cool in the sense that there was a story full of personal character behind the subject. Kinda easier to judge since you both were so similar in approach.

Sym- Pretty solid storytelling. It just didn't sit well with me how most this piece was so simple and direct, yet these spare overly-intelligent words were coming out of nowhere (effervesce, escher). It didn't feel like they fit too well. Overall, Good drop.

Breathless- This was more consistent in language and more relatable in the way it was told, even though both pieces had pretty much the same approach. My only problem with this was that closer. You could definitely have done better. Good storytelling though.

Both you guys were pretty neck and neck, with not much over each other. What stood out to me was the fact that I felt more connected to Breathless's piece. It hit a little harder in the manner at which it came across. Thanks guys for dropping early! MVGT Breathless.

10-15-2013, 01:18 PM	#1
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	This battle was cool. Cool in the sense that there was a story full of personal character behind the subject. Kinda easier to judge since you both were so similar in approach. Sym- Pretty solid storytelling. It just didn't sit well with me how most this piece was so simple and direct, yet these spare overly-intelligent words were coming out of nowhere (effervesce, escher). It didn't feel like they fit too well. Overall, Good drop. Breathless- This was more consistent in language and more relatable in the way it was told, even though both pieces had pretty much the same approach. My only problem with this was that closer. You could definitely have done better. Good storytelling though. Both you guys were pretty neck and neck, with not much over each other. What stood out to me was the fact that I felt more connected to Breathless's piece. It hit a little harder in the manner at which it came across. Thanks guys for dropping early! MVGT Breathless. __________________ Ahem.