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10-14-2013, 09:46 PM
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Zenland & Geno: How the Fuck you Sleep at Night?!?
Zenland..
I'm often portrayed as the sane Buddhist, But somewhere along the way I changed and became ruthless, The brave nuisance that way to the movement of crazed shootists, Shit, I'm the same dude that went back in the day and paid Judas To betray...who is it? Oh yeah that's right, it's Jesus Christ. "How the fuck do you sleep at night!?" Well, you see I just creep inside your feeble mind And dig down deep til I'm in reach of supplyin Seeds of crime that leave lined inside people's eyes. I know, I know, I'm evil, right? Bitch please. You best believe every breath you breathe is mine... Geno.. Every steps a leap in time, efforvescent demons rise Epileptic ciezures climb, feast ur eyes, recollection leaves your mind Resurected beast arrives, never left completely -sly I just text graffitti lines with my empty liesure time He's alive, reason I've been on a long hiatus Tossed the basics, matrixed, flow is off the faucet gauges Cultivated, skated, brought the one you've all awaited Call'em satan, wipe the ultimatums off your faces Fall in place and follow suite, god of truth Gothic goon, that you fools can not rebuke Swallow puke, I've produced in the universe Make your tsuni burst, turning into lucifer
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10-14-2013, 11:37 PM
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defintly some dope ass rhyming in this bitch..
your styles compliment each other well.. Quote:
geno. your first 4 lines are just hot fiyah my nigga...straight dopeness spit onto the canvas aka this message board.. cool collab kids. |
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10-15-2013, 12:50 AM
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That was such a colossal display in such a small frame. Zen brought it, then Geno injected the nos in that ho. Dope as a bitch. Salute.
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10-15-2013, 01:16 AM
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Zenland, your verse took a bit to get rolling. Then you got to the titular question and took off. The finish was very strong. Then Genocide came in and picked up right where you left off with furious rhyming. But he too trickled off a little at the end.
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I think verses like this are tough to open and close because in a way there's no reason they ever start or end. There's no purpose. And you're rhyming and writing off what's already been written. So in a way what we're seeing is a snippet of an infinite rhyme, so it takes a second to catch it, and providing closure is tough.
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10-15-2013, 05:53 AM
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Lol @my spelling, apologies. I was on the phone while writing this lol
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"How the fuck do you sleep at night!?"
Well, you see I just creep inside your feeble mind And dig down deep til I'm in reach of supplyin Seeds of crime that leave lined inside people's eyes. I know, I know, I'm evil, right? pretty sick, perfect flow geno - i cant even quote a single piece of your verse because all of it was consistently dope. probly one of the best things i've read from you, it was killer. not one word wasted, just straight killin it. would like to hear you rap that in audio nice drop fellas
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10-15-2013, 01:55 PM
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You both showed the fuck out on this one. I'd like to do a collab with you both sometime. Ill shit fellaz
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10-17-2013, 03:43 PM
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holy SHIT. geno is fucking killllling shit right now. like in the ZONE. gotta love it. zen i hate to tell u but u were just outclassed on this one lmao.. but to be honest it wouldn't of mattered who woulda collabed with him on this it woulda been the same story. i had a quotable for geno,, then another one... then another one.. another another etc.. then it was his whole verse. seriously. outstanding work. the type shit i would LOVE to write. awesome verse geno. zen urs was good, but couldn't compete on this day, lol. sorry
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10-17-2013, 03:54 PM
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It's true. Geno was a fucking killing on this shit. I sent him my verse in a pm and said I fuck went on this one before he dropped, and then he drops this shit!? I feel like the outlaws rapping on a track with Tupac right now. Thanks Geno.
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12-05-2013, 08:04 AM
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genocide murdered this
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12-05-2013, 07:13 PM
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I still dislike the structure...but I'm not seeing a whole lot of people complain about it..
So whatever works I guess. However this was dope excluding the criticism of structure. Far too short of a piece for how dope this was. I wanted to read more. Zen I think you did just as good as geno tbh. I'm not seeing a display of anyone really besting anyone here. If anything it just meshed seamlessly. Id suggest re doing this and elaborating. Geno If you're name would not have been displayed I wouldn't have known out the gate it was you writing this. This (Imo) seems different for you. It shows you can be versatile and switch up styles. Nice scheming. Nice flow. Keep scribing |
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