Master Of Arts

Mr. J · 10-13-2013, 03:55 AM

Ill admit you have skill as well regardless of how you take my criticism I suggest you chill
there's always room for improvement and you need little
but you should still approach every piece with an objective
yours is showcasing your strengths and the beginning of this is smooth
but you try to keep that edge too close and it helps and doesn't at times
the way you do it in your head is different from its written entirety
so some things can be moved around you'll see if you were where I am
keep it up

10-13-2013, 03:55 AM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Ill admit you have skill as well regardless of how you take my criticism I suggest you chill there's always room for improvement and you need little but you should still approach every piece with an objective yours is showcasing your strengths and the beginning of this is smooth but you try to keep that edge too close and it helps and doesn't at times the way you do it in your head is different from its written entirety so some things can be moved around you'll see if you were where I am keep it up __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you