Week 3 - Vividlyvague (2-0) vs. Mr. J (2-0) - VIVIDLYVAGUE WINS 6-2

Just Write · 10-12-2013, 03:38 AM

remain consistent. civilized even with this plagiarism
give away existence for a chance in this state of gifted...
ideals. I'm real if I say I am it wont change the system
but for those who choose to wait and listen
I unlock the highest achievemebt for those to blind to see it
releasing the mind of secrets take a ride with me..this ain't prosperous
the streets are poverish to our types anonymous
Treatment that's evident and shall always remain obvious

Mr J.,
since the first time i've read something from you i've enjoyed your style and your take on topics. this was no different, felt the pain, felt the emotion and liked where you took this one.

Guitar strums, drugs, excited hums... oh, the life it was,
but all the same to not know who's life it was...
Haze came over the nights of clubs, ladies with a delightful buzz...
Til once he was seduced, and she produced a substance that frightened some...
"you wanna try this with me?" she whispered, he nodded...
in mental he jotted... plotted; the instrumental to these gentle hypnotics...

Not sure of a next move, the fed captain was confused a bit...
"You don't look like a killer, so why'd you run when we were moving in?"
He paused, drowsy... looked up, "I was chasing dreams and a wake up was due within."
Soothed and slowly losing grip, he smiled knowing the truth had been...
to never be of his father's size, 'cause he just found the shoes that fit.

Vivid, firstoff fuck you for making me read something that long so early in the season, thats like some frank/red glare 100 line shit tbh. anyways there were parts that i was really into and then some sections that i felt a little bored but the parts that i did like outweighed the boring parts. i really got annoyed with the little scab peels back, puss spills over little shit. i think it takes away from your flow and the piece itself.

this is a hard one for me because i enjoyed both pieces for a few different reasons. i think i was more entertained by vivid's this week though so mvgt him

10-12-2013, 03:38 AM	#4
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997617	remain consistent. civilized even with this plagiarism give away existence for a chance in this state of gifted... ideals. I'm real if I say I am it wont change the system but for those who choose to wait and listen I unlock the highest achievemebt for those to blind to see it releasing the mind of secrets take a ride with me..this ain't prosperous the streets are poverish to our types anonymous Treatment that's evident and shall always remain obvious Mr J., since the first time i've read something from you i've enjoyed your style and your take on topics. this was no different, felt the pain, felt the emotion and liked where you took this one. Guitar strums, drugs, excited hums... oh, the life it was, but all the same to not know who's life it was... Haze came over the nights of clubs, ladies with a delightful buzz... Til once he was seduced, and she produced a substance that frightened some... "you wanna try this with me?" she whispered, he nodded... in mental he jotted... plotted; the instrumental to these gentle hypnotics... Not sure of a next move, the fed captain was confused a bit... "You don't look like a killer, so why'd you run when we were moving in?" He paused, drowsy... looked up, "I was chasing dreams and a wake up was due within." Soothed and slowly losing grip, he smiled knowing the truth had been... to never be of his father's size, 'cause he just found the shoes that fit. Vivid, firstoff fuck you for making me read something that long so early in the season, thats like some frank/red glare 100 line shit tbh. anyways there were parts that i was really into and then some sections that i felt a little bored but the parts that i did like outweighed the boring parts. i really got annoyed with the little scab peels back, puss spills over little shit. i think it takes away from your flow and the piece itself. this is a hard one for me because i enjoyed both pieces for a few different reasons. i think i was more entertained by vivid's this week though so mvgt him __________________