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10-11-2013, 10:41 PM
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SYRACUSE
Join Date: Jan 2013
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clutterbuck is the clear winner here. Dope story with good progression and cadence. script I wasn't really feeling yours in any aspect, structure was eh and most of it seemed nonsensical which is weird because a few solid lines were in there as well. Maybe focus more when you write? Don't know, keep writing gentlemen.
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