Week 3 - NYCSPITZ (1-1) vs. Zenland (1-1) - NYCSPITZ WINS 5-4

Mr. J · 10-11-2013, 07:32 PM

Zen, You had a dope idea I thought, the flow was decent
but then it felt like you kind of slipped up after awhile
it's excusable, the piece itself was pretty dope though..
it reminded me of Gimme The Loot in a odd sort of way
dope track, dope transition from the thought to the man as well
I think it went along with the picture you two were given

NYC, You took a more abstract approach, which is dope
there's so much to what you wrote that it seems crazy
you kept the flow of your piece smooth from beginning to end
I dislike quoting when it comes to battles of the deeper variety..
but this little section

lose the line between reality, being lucid in dreams.
mad scientist mashed with toon juvenile teens.
Nasty Nicene ninja, extol immutable themes
gassy...and more ephemeral than Jupiter's sheen -
^^^dope

that just came together so nicely...

i enjoyed both pieces because...well like the other battle I read
both competitors brought a different aspect to their pieces
basically making this quite an enjoyable read for me...
both of y'all had an interesting take on the pic, this would have been a fun write for me
down to my vote it's really a tough decision..both are great pieces in there own right
but there could only be one coming out of this with the W...
I am gonna have to go with NYC...he showcased a lot in what little he wrote
not many can do that...great battle fellas...

v/NYC

10-11-2013, 07:32 PM	#3
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Zen, You had a dope idea I thought, the flow was decent but then it felt like you kind of slipped up after awhile it's excusable, the piece itself was pretty dope though.. it reminded me of Gimme The Loot in a odd sort of way dope track, dope transition from the thought to the man as well I think it went along with the picture you two were given NYC, You took a more abstract approach, which is dope there's so much to what you wrote that it seems crazy you kept the flow of your piece smooth from beginning to end I dislike quoting when it comes to battles of the deeper variety.. but this little section lose the line between reality, being lucid in dreams. mad scientist mashed with toon juvenile teens. Nasty Nicene ninja, extol immutable themes gassy...and more ephemeral than Jupiter's sheen - ^^^dope that just came together so nicely... i enjoyed both pieces because...well like the other battle I read both competitors brought a different aspect to their pieces basically making this quite an enjoyable read for me... both of y'all had an interesting take on the pic, this would have been a fun write for me down to my vote it's really a tough decision..both are great pieces in there own right but there could only be one coming out of this with the W... I am gonna have to go with NYC...he showcased a lot in what little he wrote not many can do that...great battle fellas... v/NYC __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you