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Old 10-09-2013, 01:11 AM   #1
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this was awesome.

brought me back to the days of writing tales of knighthood and wizardry. the epic soldiers of fortune. you took a perspective on it that i have never seen quite this way. i think the story of Runiford would have been most commoners' first instinct to write. but you have that sort of lateral approach to writing that transcends what first appears in a concept and turns it on its head.

you did indeed tell this story in a convincing and confident voice. it never got a point where it became corny - and there was potential for that based on principle alone - you wrote the mother dragon's story with the power of an experienced author of fiction.

there was no paragraph or stanza that stood out especially for me. even upon re-reading. but that says nothing negative about the work - simply that it only functions properly as a complete verse. sum of the whole > it's parts etc

even the dialogue was believable. insofar as the context of the piece was concerned

idk man i just really enjoyed this. great character sketch and better interpretation of a picture topic.

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