Escape The Pain

Just Write · 10-07-2013, 11:11 PM

I really like this minus the half slepped word throughout, that was kinda annoying. but i did dig the message, flow was a bit choppy towards the end at first read but smoothed out after i read it a couple times. really dug these lines

.... I'm stuck in a state of mind that theirs gotta b more
In this life... Its like what's the point of being confident for
.... Compliments, sure...Are nice to get but what's the price of it
My time is spent..& the cost for the life u live.. is typa big

think you should have put kinda big as apposed to typa big, doesnt really make sense but thats just minor shit bro. stay up

10-07-2013, 11:11 PM	#2
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997617	I really like this minus the half slepped word throughout, that was kinda annoying. but i did dig the message, flow was a bit choppy towards the end at first read but smoothed out after i read it a couple times. really dug these lines .... I'm stuck in a state of mind that theirs gotta b more In this life... Its like what's the point of being confident for .... Compliments, sure...Are nice to get but what's the price of it My time is spent..& the cost for the life u live.. is typa big think you should have put kinda big as apposed to typa big, doesnt really make sense but thats just minor shit bro. stay up __________________