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Zen · 10-04-2013, 11:20 PM

Pretty enjoyable read here for the most part. I gotta admit though I didn't like opening lines and the shit lines towards the middle. They just came off a little weak to me but the rest flowed pretty fuckin good especially blasted rhyming section. Kinda made me think of a female version of slim shady lol. Good drop alli. Would appreciate feed on a piece of mine if you get time. I'll drop a link.

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=21408

10-04-2013, 11:20 PM	#2
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Pretty enjoyable read here for the most part. I gotta admit though I didn't like opening lines and the shit lines towards the middle. They just came off a little weak to me but the rest flowed pretty fuckin good especially blasted rhyming section. Kinda made me think of a female version of slim shady lol. Good drop alli. Would appreciate feed on a piece of mine if you get time. I'll drop a link. http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=21408 Last edited by Zen; 10-04-2013 at 11:24 PM.