Week 1 - dead man vs. UNFUKWITABLE - dead man WINS 8-0

Zen · 09-27-2013, 05:27 PM

Cool battle. Two very different performances.

UNFUKWITABLE- Your verse reminded me of Old Em like SSLP Eminem. At least that's how I read it in his old voice. Overall this piece was pretty funny and written like a crazy person for the most part. The problem with it would be the rhyme selection. Throw in a multi here and there and switch to more complex words that's my trick and it makes me look smarter than I really am. But that's the only negative on this imo. Good first showing.

dead man- First off let me talk about the technical ability you displayed here. Damn near perfect imo. You laid this shit out in the way only you can. As far as the story goes, I'm getting tired of the apocalypse theme that's getting played out but this was a unique take on it. I really didn't even see this when I looked at the picture so that's great creativity. Props.

V/ dead man. Dead outdid his competitor in every way but that's just because he's on another level. UNFUKWITABLE keep it up holmes.

09-27-2013, 05:27 PM	#5
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Cool battle. Two very different performances. UNFUKWITABLE- Your verse reminded me of Old Em like SSLP Eminem. At least that's how I read it in his old voice. Overall this piece was pretty funny and written like a crazy person for the most part. The problem with it would be the rhyme selection. Throw in a multi here and there and switch to more complex words that's my trick and it makes me look smarter than I really am. But that's the only negative on this imo. Good first showing. dead man- First off let me talk about the technical ability you displayed here. Damn near perfect imo. You laid this shit out in the way only you can. As far as the story goes, I'm getting tired of the apocalypse theme that's getting played out but this was a unique take on it. I really didn't even see this when I looked at the picture so that's great creativity. Props. V/ dead man. Dead outdid his competitor in every way but that's just because he's on another level. UNFUKWITABLE keep it up holmes.