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09-17-2013, 06:02 PM
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The Clown Prince
Join Date: Apr 2013
Posts: 5,046
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Quite nice..quite nice...had a Nasir type of presence here
the vibe was smooth but the "hook" is what really put me off at first I don't enjoy such writings unless in a song...regardless the flow had it's high points, the first section was great second section had me kind of mixed up somewhat... I don't know how but it just did...the end was cool though nice work...keep writing
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