Interdimensional portal physics

Split · 09-06-2013, 06:59 AM

Nice hat.

Wording was dope as fuck here. You didnt waste or misplace a single word. Content was cool... I'm not really familiar with Star Trek or sci-fi but this gave off a light-hearted vibe, kinda like a cultural supplement to explain the magnificence of future technologies. Was that a CERN reference I saw?

Marco Polo line was srs dope.

Had a hard time fitting God into this verse and I mean that figuratively. like I feel like any sort of religious allusion is a tactical ploy but I don't get it, other than the idea that people claim we're "toying with God's physics" but in a way God has always been the alpha and the omega of human development... as we figuratively, literally move away from the idea of the garden of Eden we move closer to it, figuratively, literally.... such a self-fulfilling prophecy. like sending your kids out to go on an adventure/ play and they always come home as the sun sets

Good verse! I really liked it. Could have done with some more full-bodied flow or advanced rhyme control, just as icing on the cake. You're definitely capable.

09-06-2013, 06:59 AM	#2
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	Nice hat. Wording was dope as fuck here. You didnt waste or misplace a single word. Content was cool... I'm not really familiar with Star Trek or sci-fi but this gave off a light-hearted vibe, kinda like a cultural supplement to explain the magnificence of future technologies. Was that a CERN reference I saw? Marco Polo line was srs dope. Had a hard time fitting God into this verse and I mean that figuratively. like I feel like any sort of religious allusion is a tactical ploy but I don't get it, other than the idea that people claim we're "toying with God's physics" but in a way God has always been the alpha and the omega of human development... as we figuratively, literally move away from the idea of the garden of Eden we move closer to it, figuratively, literally.... such a self-fulfilling prophecy. like sending your kids out to go on an adventure/ play and they always come home as the sun sets Good verse! I really liked it. Could have done with some more full-bodied flow or advanced rhyme control, just as icing on the cake. You're definitely capable. __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com