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Old 02-07-2013, 10:43 AM   #1
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Idk about Geno's verse, it seemed too wordy. Which, in effect, made it a tad difficult to read. Topical battles, most of the time, come down to what style of writing the voters lean towards. I enjoyed the words that you were using, your vocabulary is very good. I just don't think that all of it was relevant to what you were trying to get across. The writing capabilities are there, you have the skill. This piece just didn't wow me at any part through it. Like a chore, instead of a verse, if you get what I'm saying.

Tyson, I enjoyed reading the story that you had in your piece. A lot of times I can't even read a piece anymore if there isn't an underlying back story, a REASON that all of these words are being laid out. You did a good job of conveying the purpose of the verse. Your 'writing skills' could have been cleaner. By that, like vocab, wording, etc. But the way you wrote this piece made it an enjoyable read.

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