So where does old man like me find competitive writing? - Page 2

Formal Logic · 08-25-2013, 01:11 AM

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Originally Posted by Jim Blaze

We dont got that shit here.....what is it like.....old country buffet?

See....idgaf if shes happy tho thats the beauty of it.....shes just a body double to make it look like im not a weordo eating alone. But inside im alone.

We're all alone inside..... except for the ecoli that lives with you from that old country buffet.

PancakeBrah · 08-25-2013, 01:13 AM

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Originally Posted by Jim Blaze

We dont got that shit here.....what is it like.....old country buffet?

WORD @ OLD COUNTRY BUFFET.

My grandparents took me to that place on every visit when I was a buck. I used to think it was a fancy as fuck place as a young man.

Aesthetic · 08-25-2013, 01:42 AM

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Originally Posted by Formal Logic

Roll em out

My bitches are 12's
These are 7's

Formal Logic · 08-25-2013, 01:43 AM

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Originally Posted by Aesthetic

My bitches are 12's
These are 7's

Literally because there is 7?

Formal Logic · 08-25-2013, 01:44 AM

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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah

WORD @ OLD COUNTRY BUFFET.

My grandparents took me to that place on every visit when I was a buck. I used to think it was a fancy as fuck place as a young man.

I'll assume you enjoyed the pancakes.

Aesthetic · 08-25-2013, 01:44 AM

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Originally Posted by Formal Logic

Literally because there is 7?

There is 8, notice the woman on the left being groped by some hideous bitch I had to hide. They are a pair, it's like a 2 for 1 deal; who could argue?

Formal Logic · 08-25-2013, 01:47 AM

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Originally Posted by Aesthetic

There is 8, notice the woman on the left being groped by some hideous bitch I had to hide. They are a pair, it's like a 2 for 1 deal; who could argue?

I could go for conjoined twins. Haven't got to that all time low yet.

PancakeBrah · 08-25-2013, 01:49 AM

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Originally Posted by Formal Logic

I'll assume you enjoyed the pancakes.

Nah I was about that roast beef and free ice cream dessert. YOU COULD MAKE AS MANY CONES AS YOUR HEART DESIRED.

Vulgar · 08-25-2013, 01:49 AM

Welcome. Do you write?

Formal Logic · 08-25-2013, 01:50 AM

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Originally Posted by Vulgar

Welcome. Do you write?

Fairly well.

Vulgar · 08-25-2013, 01:52 AM

Cool, looking forward to it.

Formal Logic · 08-25-2013, 01:52 AM

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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah

Nah I was about that roast beef and free ice cream dessert. YOU COULD MAKE AS MANY CONES AS YOUR HEART DESIRED.

I'm more of a wings and chocolate fondue kind of guy but I can dig it.

PancakeBrah · 08-25-2013, 01:56 AM

@Vulgar Reading and re-reading your critiques of not only my verses but others, I feel as though you have this well-earned air of superiority. That cute, no one knows what the fuck you're talking feed is belying you now. You miss the point and heart of a lot of verses when I review feed.

Aesthetic · 08-25-2013, 01:58 AM

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Originally Posted by Formal Logic

I could go for conjoined twins. Haven't got to that all time low yet.

U ever got a reach around with an inverted gorrilla mask? Them conjoined twins know what they are doing.

Id explain but it's graphic.

Vulgar · 08-25-2013, 02:01 AM

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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah

@Vulgar Reading and re-reading your critiques of not only my verses but others, I feel as though you have this well-earned air of superiority. That cute, no one knows what the fuck you're talking feed is belying you now. You miss the point and heart of a lot of verses when I review feed.

My reading comprehension has been sort of off lately so I try to have fun with it. I get fatigued easily now, it's quite frustrating. However, if I have an opinion about something I'm going to be confident about what I think about it. But yeah, I don't think I try to exert any superiority - it's just the Vulgarian way of communication. What in particular do I need to work on?

Formal Logic · 08-25-2013, 02:01 AM

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Originally Posted by Aesthetic

U ever got a reach around with an inverted gorrilla mask? Them conjoined twins know what they are doing.

Id explain but it's graphic.

Please.

Indulge me.

Vulgar · 08-25-2013, 02:04 AM

@PancakeBrah, upon review, the feed I gave on your Pale verse was horrible.

Split · 08-25-2013, 02:04 AM

In on Pinot Grij alias thread

PancakeBrah · 08-25-2013, 02:07 AM

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Originally Posted by Vulgar

My reading comprehension has been sort of off lately so I try to have fun with it. I get fatigued easily now, it's quite frustrating. However, if I have an opinion about something I'm going to be confident about what I think about it. But yeah, I don't think I try to exert any superiority - it's just the Vulgarian way of communication. What in particular do I need to work on?

This mostly stems from you completely whiffing on the obvious sarcasm of my Grizzly Bears pieces. I'm very petty. But when I read your feed, not just of that particular piece, then read some perfectly constructed verse of yours with great rhymes it jives greatly in my personal estimation of your true level of analysis. And analysis applies more to pieces than feed. There never seems to be a piece you feed that you truly like. Even if a feed is positive, it's in this weird language that makes the reader of feed more interested in it than the piece. You insist upon yourself in feed. The ever present 'keep doing you' is almost condescending.

Certain · 08-25-2013, 02:08 AM

My goal with feedback is to provide commentary that could be relevant toward future verses. I find myself often talking almost exclusively about the writing rather than the content. In votes, I try to bring up a person's approach to a topic and maybe talk more about the content, but even then, the goal is to highlight strengths and work out weaknesses.

I think a lot of people here seem more focused on discerning meaning, in finding their own value in verses. I do that while I read, but the reason we want feedback is so we can improve, right?

08-25-2013, 01:56 AM	#33
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 13,052 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899406	@Vulgar Reading and re-reading your critiques of not only my verses but others, I feel as though you have this well-earned air of superiority. That cute, no one knows what the fuck you're talking feed is belying you now. You miss the point and heart of a lot of verses when I review feed. __________________ If I ventured in the slipstream Between the viaducts of your dreams Where immobil steel rims crack And the ditch in the back road stop Could you find me?

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08-25-2013, 02:08 AM	#40
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,072 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899403	My goal with feedback is to provide commentary that could be relevant toward future verses. I find myself often talking almost exclusively about the writing rather than the content. In votes, I try to bring up a person's approach to a topic and maybe talk more about the content, but even then, the goal is to highlight strengths and work out weaknesses. I think a lot of people here seem more focused on discerning meaning, in finding their own value in verses. I do that while I read, but the reason we want feedback is so we can improve, right? __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

08-25-2013, 01:49 AM	#29
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604317	Welcome. Do you write?

08-25-2013, 01:52 AM	#31
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604317	Cool, looking forward to it.