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Exis · 08-22-2013, 04:08 PM

skin skates over ribs, bruises balloon
tears attend, of course, traffic loses its tune
her teeth stink, should have deleted her skull
so peaceful and full, like sheep, asleep in their wool

^^Nice.

the sky a sort of distance, natural, ankle-rawness
black, enormous, everything intact but formless

^^Yep.

As dull mentioned your scheme be nice...thought the flow was quite good due to your word usage, I actually really dug the content as it just worked man...shit wasn't overdone and all in all it came out solid, not to mention refreshin'.

Stay uppity.

08-22-2013, 04:08 PM	#6
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	skin skates over ribs, bruises balloon tears attend, of course, traffic loses its tune her teeth stink, should have deleted her skull so peaceful and full, like sheep, asleep in their wool ^^Nice. the sky a sort of distance, natural, ankle-rawness black, enormous, everything intact but formless ^^Yep. As dull mentioned your scheme be nice...thought the flow was quite good due to your word usage, I actually really dug the content as it just worked man...shit wasn't overdone and all in all it came out solid, not to mention refreshin'. Stay uppity.