DETERMINISM, FREE WILL, GUILTY, INNOCENT. deadman

PiE · 08-22-2013, 06:48 AM

dead lion, I like the digital leech analogy and it's something I write about sometimes. your flow and narration were both smooth and witty as well to make the religious aspects you introduced even smooth as religion is never a smooth subject to adhere to. you used more imagery towards the end, which I thought was also a great touch as it's something I like doing on my own verses. done colorful images were drawn too and that helped bring the topic to life because both religion and science can bore readers who rather just be entertained by verses. I liked this... made me slightly excited to see what zygote came with to match it.

zygote, your expression of free will was very scientific. I really enjoyed it from an analytical point of view to the facts. your writing style sounds like an old professor teaching a sociology course. it didn't really have the wit that dead man had, but there was some evidence of a light hearted cynic in there. flow was cool for the most part, but content was obviously the focus and this was definitely focused on the topic.

08-22-2013, 06:48 AM	#10
PiE el es a la mode Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: slice of heaven Posts: 94 Battle Record: 1-4 Rep Power: 37	dead lion, I like the digital leech analogy and it's something I write about sometimes. your flow and narration were both smooth and witty as well to make the religious aspects you introduced even smooth as religion is never a smooth subject to adhere to. you used more imagery towards the end, which I thought was also a great touch as it's something I like doing on my own verses. done colorful images were drawn too and that helped bring the topic to life because both religion and science can bore readers who rather just be entertained by verses. I liked this... made me slightly excited to see what zygote came with to match it. zygote, your expression of free will was very scientific. I really enjoyed it from an analytical point of view to the facts. your writing style sounds like an old professor teaching a sociology course. it didn't really have the wit that dead man had, but there was some evidence of a light hearted cynic in there. flow was cool for the most part, but content was obviously the focus and this was definitely focused on the topic. __________________