Week 3 - Mr. J v VERITAS - V WINS

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VERITAS: Man, I can relate to your verse so closely. It applies to a lot of shit going on in my life. You took this topic and wrote sort of a counterpoint of sorts, an antinostalgia creed. It was real and warm but also cold and distant, in the right ways. Your mechanics were all over the place, though. Perhaps the worst was the line about "The force we endorse," where the rhymes for the only time all verse felt forced and out of place. You had a pattern going, even if it wasn't the smoothest, then broke it for probably the thinnest line of the verse. But that's not a deal-breaker. I think you ultimately could have done something to give this verse a little more direction because it came across as a bit cliché and redundant, but it was a good approach.

Mr. J: I've read a handful of your verses and cyphers at this point, and this seemed more rushed than any. I didn't like the rhyming off "and" or the repeating "a regular day in hell ol' friend." Your content was vague, and your rhyme schemes were so varied that it was tough to completely pick up your flow. There really wasn't much content, at least not building on your challenge verse. In short, you're a better writer than this verse reflected.

Vote: VERITAS