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cool battle.
veritas - you used a much more traditional style in this piece and I think it really shined because of it. you always have a deep and profound message but with the convential mechanics and structure it made it much more cohesive for me. really enjoyed this verse. A fact of life is change, not only yourself, but also those most closest to your heart The other fact is that change is relative and operates at different rates of stop and start so true. this whole verse resonated with me deeply. mr.j - cool swaggy type of verse. flowed really well even though I disagree with your choice to end a line with "and" at one point. way too short though to stand up to veritas' verse. and it was somewhat empty as far as message and content. I did enjoy the flow of it though. good battle vote- Veritas
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