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Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 65
Battle Record: 0-4
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Mr. Sinister: The metaphors are great. The word play is terrific. Love the opener -- the clothing line is a great personal. The 1-1 line is great especially when combined with the "cross problems/loss column". The scheme is intricate. The ryhmes were tight. The punches weren't super strong. Obey: Another really strong performance by you. The opening line was probably your weakest. The second line was super-stretched and the punch didn't land to well. I think the second line would be better if all the bars were similar length, but the second half sort of stretches out. The rest of the punches landed well, were creative, and hit hard. Liked the use of rhythm throughout the scheme. Two really strong performances. Gotta go with Mr. Sinister as his first and last two were a bit better. |
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