Round 2: PancakeBrah vs. Pryde {PancakeBrah wins}

Mike Wrecka · 08-06-2013, 08:22 PM

cool battle.

pancake - nice verse. very good story. ive been to coney island plenty times and have seen the street performers and ive always wondered what their life is like tbh. you described it pretty well here. was it a story in the classic sense? with an introduction, conflict, resolution. no. but it was the story of a man. the story of a human being and his thoughts and complexities. it told the story of his day and had good emotion. I also enjoyed the structure. good stuff. .

pryde - you seemed to to write a flex piece about yourself I assume. their was really no storytelling happening here at all tbh. it all felt very filler-ish. you went more swag and flow than anything else.

vote- cakester

08-06-2013, 08:22 PM	#7
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,591 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779338	cool battle. pancake - nice verse. very good story. ive been to coney island plenty times and have seen the street performers and ive always wondered what their life is like tbh. you described it pretty well here. was it a story in the classic sense? with an introduction, conflict, resolution. no. but it was the story of a man. the story of a human being and his thoughts and complexities. it told the story of his day and had good emotion. I also enjoyed the structure. good stuff. . pryde - you seemed to to write a flex piece about yourself I assume. their was really no storytelling happening here at all tbh. it all felt very filler-ish. you went more swag and flow than anything else. vote- cakester __________________ A.bove T.he R.est