Writers Challenge League - "Midgets"

08-02-2013, 09:40 PM

Word I enjoyed this.
Typically im not a fan of lines that conceptually don't end in that line (like stand-alones), but u made it work imo (i feel its very effective audio wise, not so much text tho)
I also enjoyed ur wordchoice, how u used comparative words to describe size, and that fit it well. I also enjoyed ur approach, u flipped the topic inside out, I felt that was an original way to go about this, and also was very effective. Scheming wise, this was on point as fuck...and i think thats what allowed me to like the bleeding thoughts. It also gave u some leeway with ur flow, which read fluent.
I did enjoy this, and its a disappointment that u got no showed.
Dope verse though.

08-02-2013, 09:40 PM	#3
Rawn M.D. Guest Posts: n/a	Word I enjoyed this. Typically im not a fan of lines that conceptually don't end in that line (like stand-alones), but u made it work imo (i feel its very effective audio wise, not so much text tho) I also enjoyed ur wordchoice, how u used comparative words to describe size, and that fit it well. I also enjoyed ur approach, u flipped the topic inside out, I felt that was an original way to go about this, and also was very effective. Scheming wise, this was on point as fuck...and i think thats what allowed me to like the bleeding thoughts. It also gave u some leeway with ur flow, which read fluent. I did enjoy this, and its a disappointment that u got no showed. Dope verse though.