Week 2 - Storyteller vs PancakeBrah - PANCAKEBRAH WINS

zygote · 08-02-2013, 06:06 AM

PancakeBrah, enjoyed the attention to detail, there were a lot of different things you made known without divulging into. E.g., the references to the Norse past/intermixing with the Irish and Canadian etc. The different nuances like the cultural food and clothes references. It was short but every line had depth, power and a reason for being.

Storyteller, liked the first half especially, the historical times etc were interesting to learn and it shows you put some effort, or did some research to find these facts out. Hopefully, you enjoyed find out those facts as much as I enjoyed reading them from you in rhyme format. Only disliked the class-setting aspect, this feels kind of unnecessary, kind of making a story for the sake of a story. Perhaps, it would have been stronger to drop the fictional aspect and expand on your first-half with that non-fictional approach. Voting for PancakeBrah.

08-02-2013, 06:06 AM	#4
zygote Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 501 Battle Record: 33-12 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Art of Writing League (3x) Rep Power: 737828	PancakeBrah, enjoyed the attention to detail, there were a lot of different things you made known without divulging into. E.g., the references to the Norse past/intermixing with the Irish and Canadian etc. The different nuances like the cultural food and clothes references. It was short but every line had depth, power and a reason for being. Storyteller, liked the first half especially, the historical times etc were interesting to learn and it shows you put some effort, or did some research to find these facts out. Hopefully, you enjoyed find out those facts as much as I enjoyed reading them from you in rhyme format. Only disliked the class-setting aspect, this feels kind of unnecessary, kind of making a story for the sake of a story. Perhaps, it would have been stronger to drop the fictional aspect and expand on your first-half with that non-fictional approach. Voting for PancakeBrah. Last edited by zygote; 08-02-2013 at 06:08 AM.