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07-28-2013, 11:53 PM
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Location: MI
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I like this especially the end clean up the grammar so it isnt distracting to the reader
as a writer i wont tell u to not break up ur lines like that but it did mess up the rhyme pattern as i read it but hey do what make sense to you :) pretty good and intriguing tho |
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