WEEK THIRTEEN: BROKENHAL0 (6-5) vs ADVERSE (5-3) HAL0 WINS 3-0

[Adverse]

AOWL Season X WEEK THIRTEEN

@brokenhal0


Verse Due: FRIDAY JULY 15TH @ 11:59PM

Line min: 10

Max: 60


Rules: http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=150311

Topic:






GOOD LUCK

[Adverse]

Extendo friendo

[brokenhal0]

'' Aye Love You ''



Turn the consolidated stone into consecrated gold
light a flare with the driftwood and sip rum to wash away the smoke
as the waves crashed I heard gargling screams as bloated body's float
the waves fast soaking my jeans still had rubys in the seems of my coat
diamond talismans glitter in the blazing embers of oak cindering flame
jewels from forgotten palaces of princes and kings whispering your name
everybody's dead and im alone drifting away with treasures a long distance remains
it don't really matter at the waters edge all existence will drain
a canopy covered in cane earths covered in squares my shirts covered in stains
jumped overboard to watch the ship go down while covered in flames
entering choppy waves under the bridge you can not be saved
reminds me of the ocks chopped cheese and it's sloppy taste
in distant summits beyond the body lays an active ocean plane
where the gods give orcas potions for more imposing brains
faced with impotent thoughts he did the most atrocious things
abandoned ship during coast guard raids but the hull remains
sleeping in the ocean I learned there's no such thing as hope or change
sneak thieving on the boat in prisons I beat bozos with a open blade
when i was hiding in the moats gators dared to approach my space
when i was pirating the senegalese soca gang it was a solstice day
rent space on your deck and im known to stay
change the shape of reality while you swim in a molten lake
but your not melting cause your molding broken shapes molsen ice
the fires burn under the northern lights moldy planks hold me tight
In the ocean I can see the fireflys and the flying fish looking at the ocean with idle eyes
body parts floating like defiled brides kill offs of krill all that bait is piled high
in the motions a shark circles it's entire pride 'diner time'
I got the treasures with the prize inside it's worth more then any guy could buy
I paddled hard like the school teacher who got excited by a childs cry
when he questioned god and got sacrificed at the alter of idol signs
no vital signs don't buy into believers like Poseidon I don't die
I become the drop of devotion in the ocean of your higher mind
the captains putting poison in your pints of wine
so you can point fingers at the guy inside
extinguishing this little light of mine
another pirate parading on entitled time
individualizing the title pride even oil spills are a small tie of dye
in neptunes tidal shrine remember the walls are tiled
with piles of fish and firefly's
the final find maritime wars greek fire and cyanide
dark forces try to force hands but they die in time
sliding doors sleigh of hands whose by your side
designed to dine on vital forces outta sight outta mind
claymores and iron horses annihilated submarines at the fire lines
soldiers from another universe sent to kill pirates over violent crimes
you in another universe sent to yourself for guidance in times of grime
shine divine the ice walls that cover antarctica side is lies
if i don't make it to shore then i will die inside that's when things
tend to finalize the sky above obscured azure like delilahs eyes
the falling ark of noah placed animal souls in your body
the hallmark of goa was watching the king cobras teleport through walls in lobby's
portions of all raiders endorse this code to copy
on the ocean you can meet the soul of ghandi
a piece of yourself finds peace in a solar body
sand and ash under my toes as I tow - the rowboats beside me
he thought he reached samadi cause he knows karate and can control his body
plug my mics in open satellites and watch certain humans glow under blackened lights
feeling like Cervantes with a calibrated soul salivate and moan he needs to leave the boat
consolidated home but he will drown outside his gilded sea a big canoe in a little stream
the piss clams squirt under his congealing feet in the middle of trees
starving for a taste of salt after that ship wreck he can face it all
be happy to survive cause fire has a place to fall
as the final sail becomes a shadow beneath the surface
we tend to realize sometimes our pride deep sea dives just to defeat the purpose
I love you ....

[Adverse]

Full Circle

Have you heard?

Earlier this week they found a logbook from days forgotten
Wearing its age, the spine crooked and the pages rotten
It was finally found in a chest on a sandy shore after all the long searches
The memoir sealed with a cursive name, adorned with “John Burgess”
As the researchers peeled it open, eager of what their eyes would discover
They read the phrase printed earnestly on the inside of the cover

“Ye would be wise to remember...
There be a reason all these seas runneth red
Monsters aren’t born, they’re conceived through bloodshed”

I was eight when it all began, the world was full of promises
Born on the ocean, onto a ship full of colonists
My father was a man of prominence, in search of new land for the king
Looking to further the long reaching arms of his vast regime
Everything was smooth sailing on our maiden pilgrimage
Created multiple villages, made them the safest pavilions
The thing about exploring new territories is you don’t know where the villains live
I still remember the night they found us, their anger, the militance
Even the blood moon turned away from us, took a break from its vigilance
They’re slaying the innocents, all the women and children hit
I still feel the cold piercing through me, the pirates sword steely tips
The blade went straight through my naval, the wound wasn’t fatal
Whether that was lady luck or misfortunes doing remains to be seen...
I watched the scene play out, through half shut eyes, lying on this blood-bathed boat
Daddy was the captain so he was the last to go.
They asked him if he had any last remarks, he responded with a saddened “no”
Then without hesitation they drew a blade and slashed his throat
I remember lying there, dying, tears welling in my eyes
But only thing on my mind was vengeance, I fought like hell to just survive
Fashioned my shirt into a tourniquet, wrapped it around my abdomen
Long recovery process, but I had to make sure I hadn’t seen the last of him


I remember being fixated on the murderer, never took my eyes off of you
And as I grew with this bitterness the irony I became a pirate like you
I went from coast to coast with the task of assembling the mightiest crew
We spelled your name out in the blood of every titan we slew
Remaining in hiding, to catch you off guard and make you pay
Then came the date, 20 years exactly from that fateful day


—-
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As for the rest of the story, I’ve hired super star actor Donnie Wahlberg to tell you my vision for the ending! Welcome, Donnie!

*Donnie appears from out of nowhere in a fog of green mist, he is Boston*

“Yah Mateys!” Donnie proclaims in an accent that borderlines terrible pirate and amazing Brooklyn Brawler.

*the audience boos, they wanted Boogie Nights, they obviously have never seen Saw 2 which is a cinematic masterpiece*

“Adverse summoned me here to explain the rest of the story he was too lazy to write” Donnie explains. “Sooo it went like this

The crew sneaks on to the ship that murdered John Burgess’s father, they kill all crewmen EXCEPT for the captain’s son, Burgess does this to prove he’s different than the murderer, better than him, before filleting him with a sword

20 years pass and Burgess is awakened to the smell of smoke, his ship is on fire ! He looks down into the ocean to see a man with Molotov cocktails on a rowboat, it’s the son of the man who murdered his dad who he then murdered for justice! The story comes full circle, Burgess smiles and returns to his room on the ship accepting his fate and writing one last entry into the logbook. Does John have a son who will one day continue the cycle? The lazy answer is maybe.

The credits roll, and the phrase from the beginning is reiterated once again


“Ye would be wise to remember...
There be a reason all these seas runneth red
Monsters aren’t born, they’re conceived through bloodshed”

And that’s it! Mr. Adverse can I have my NFT now?”

[Soule]

Halo. If I'm gonna nitpick ANYTHING, it'd be that jeans weren't actually a thing until the 1800s while pirates were around during the 17th and 18th century. Universe kinda did the same thing with energy drinks lol but it's really a small eye twitch rather than a verse destroying mistake. Overall this was really fucking dope. Had the Assassin's Creed Black Flags / Pirates of the Caribbean vibes mixed with Shakespeare. Really liked the pace and narration here. Really good piece, bro.

Adverse, I'm conflicted, boo. On one hand, that first half is REALLY fucking well written. Like, better than your piece last week. On the other hand, that second half, while comical af, really lost what you had going imho. I feel like you should stick to your niche and if your niche is depressing shit than fuck it write depressing shit lol. It was funny though and others may disagree with me. I just feel like you really could've contended here if you maintained what you had going before Donnie Wahlburg appeared.

Overall this was a dope battle and I really think the outcome is up in the air, but personally, this would've gone the other way if Adverse kept doing what he was doing while Halo remained consistent from start to finish. Really enjoyed this one fellas but...

vote Hal0

[Eviction]

Dope picture, Idk I get pirrates of the carbean vibes, or maybe just pirrates in general.
The general theme is fire/smoke this season I see

Halo
Damn opening was "fire" I liked the sip rum and wash away the smoke part, opens this up with a nice picture, I was hoping you would continue woith the consolodated stone/concentrated gold scheme that would have been nice, the rest of the rhyming was okay, the covered in flames section was also cool, schemes stayed on point, I think this is your best verse all season and would have beaten me tbh.

Adverse
My favorite quote from your piece was The thing about exploring new territories is you don’t know where the villains live, the drew a blade and slashed his throat section was sick, and fought like how to survive, not as long as your other schemes but this read smooth, the ending was kind of ridiculous and kind of funny, like adverse summoned me here part, the NFT part was ridiculous and I can't understand where that fits, I get an image of butters now haha.

v/ halo
adverse obvisouly phoned it in at the end, it's cool to do experiments like that but don't do that shit in the playoffs LOL.

[Rawn MD]

Well that was interesting

halo - maybe it’s me, but I felt a good quarter or your lines were just there to rhyme, and gave it a more long winded feeling, then concise and poignant. However, even these “filler” type lines still contributed to the story in a way (meaning they remained on topic and cArried it, but the story would have been the same with or without them.) It would have been nice to see some stylistic show though, which I felt was lacking. The flow was solid, I think there was like only two or three times you may have gone a syllable to many, the story remained on point throughout, and your word choice was solid for the most part… only one part threw me with the tenses and felt like it just didn’t belong “plug my mica into open satellites” - just seemed weird to me here. Overall though pretty solid verse.

Adverse - idk wtf you did there lol. I honestly was enjoying your story more, I felt it to be more engaging and your word choice to be better than your opponent. Then I got to the end, and you threw me for a total loop. I mean I don’t even know what to say, you didn’t even try to rhyme it. Lol. It’s like you intentionally threw this round, even with your made up cameo. “Adverse summoned me here to explain the rest of the story he was too lazy to write” Donnie explains.” Pretty much sums it up. Which is why you lost this round, which I truly feel you could have won, even if you didn’t try to go and try to match line for line.

Vote- Halo