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Old 07-11-2022, 12:38 AM   #1
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AOWL Season X WEEK THIRTEEN

@Rawn MD @Sinacog


Verse Due: FRIDAY JULY 15TH @ 11:59PM

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Old 07-11-2022, 03:45 AM   #2
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There once' was a monster; yonder man; PLUMMET SAND//
Under the green sand; serene land; SUMMONED CANS//
He raped every girl in the stream; world will be seem/
COUNTLESS MAVERICKS CHOPPED TO BITS ON HELICPTER PROPELLERS//
SELL THE COLAR TO YELLER: for bitches are mine under the dawn MOONLIGHT//
Soon bright sandwhiches with BROWNIES will be extremly recluse//
I tied a noose to a gray MONSTER: mad him kill himself with words//
MADE HIM FILL HIMSELF WITH WORDS: MADE HIM KILLHIMSELF WITH WORDS; OH' made him kill himself with words//
FULFILLMENT OF THE BIRD: it's cold outside; winter kills the sun//
I plumment one million suns down the stream of the nile/denial//
I killed a zillion doves from the stream of the WILD//
I'm corporal callous; smelling malice; and chopping CABAGE//
I'm freaking fabric; the sands of time our mine; and wine//
WINE AND CRACKERs; I eat wine and crackers; time is backwards//
For I slaughtered chickens and cows before time and space//
I'm erased from the cunieform; onto the UNICORN//
STUPID HORNS; stupid porn; I AM BORN;//
I was born LUCIFER AND SATAN; mixed with demi-god//
NOW MY RIGHTEOUS BORN WILL SPLIT FACADE's///
For I am the man with a plan; IN HELL AND HECK//
I went to another dimension to SPLIT THE NECK//
FULFILL EFFECT; kill respect//
EAT A JET: crash a YETI TO A BILLION PIECES//
For I am porn/born to fuck bitches with no respect//
I got my checkthanhitthedeck//
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Old 07-14-2022, 07:06 PM   #3
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The swarm was immense; heat distorted their sights
bending and blending, burning, blushing by eyes
blood rushing with speeds busting seems taking flight
shoulders rubbing, crowds becoming one in the night
the strangers get stranger, a stranger stands to the side
shifting, slipping, swimming the skys
his up was her down, his fire her ice
the waters were a glow, a glow's silent surprise
each came alone, but left alone they would die
as they came together, they made the weather
they made forever ache in its time
his reflection became her obsession
as their numbers dwindled down to their prime
his love was her love, but her love was the light
the light that left alone burned only to blind
bending and blending, burning blushing by eyes
shoulders rubbing, crowds becoming one in the night
ripping clothing, thinking, ...hoping
is this where we fuck, swim, or fight
they reach their release on a beach, each ignite
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Old 07-16-2022, 02:24 PM   #4
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This was light work for sin's opponent, this was a typical verse for sin.
I knew the winner before I even read the verses, but my favorite quote from rawn

"each came alone, but left alone they would die"

v/rawn
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Old 07-16-2022, 10:20 PM   #5
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"Made him feel himself with words, made him kill himself with words."

vs.

Rawn, this was pretty decent for being short and sweet. You really didn't have to do much against AJ and I feel like you came into this battle knowing that. Pardon if my feedback isn't super detailed but doesn't seem like this verse/battle calls for it. Your cohesive concept, quick paced flow and wording was more than enough to bury the once talented weirdo.

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Old 07-17-2022, 01:54 AM   #6
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So obviously this was a one sided battle, Sinacog didn’t bring much to the table and his connection with the topic is always a little loose, this time “sand” being what he took away from it.

Rawn I liked your verse though I felt like you probably only gave it minimal attention this week (which no one blames you for) your use of alliteration and repetition brings a lot of poetic qualities to your verse. I thought it was a little vague at times like it was hard to follow along, but like I said I’m willing to give you a pass on almost anything this week seeing who your opponent was. Good work hope to see you stick around

V/Rawn
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Old 07-17-2022, 06:47 AM   #7
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Sinacog is a great writer his verse was as usual a prophecy a mockery done out of love a vision of the future
theres a deeper level of art here that idk whos trolling the troll or trolls trolling kinda reminds me of warcloud mixed with picasso

COUNTLESS MAVERICKS CHOPPED TO BITS ON HELICPTER PROPELLERS//
SELL THE COLAR TO YELLER: for bitches are mine under the dawn MOONLIGHT//
Soon bright sandwhiches with BROWNIES will be extremly recluse//
bright sandwhiches with BROWNIES will be extremly recluse//
I tied a noose to a gray MONSTER: mad him kill himself with words//
MADE HIM FILL HIMSELF WITH WORDS: MADE HIM KILLHIMSELF WITH WORDS; OH' made him kill himself with words//

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rawn md - you definitely have a skill set but your verse kinda felt safe like your
just stepping your foot in the water to check the temperature dive in man theres definitely somthing brewing beneath the surface i can tell you held back a bit that was a clean verse respect



mvgt - sinacog yes im serious

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Old 07-18-2022, 09:34 PM   #8
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RAWN MD DISMANTLED SINACOG

Sinacog:
Not the brightest candle in the lantern: Kinda reminded me of the retarded demonic version of Camron? You sir: are a shining example of hot garbage. It burns through brain cells to read these dimwits hot garbage. The real underlining issue here is: he has a bitch in his avatar. In Ancient Times we would’ve already burned Sinacog at the stake! Whose bright idea was it, to allow this flamer to continue spewing this hot mess? Somebody please put Sinacog’s LIGHTS OUT. Thanks.

MC Greg Braid E:
Man, This doesn’t hold a candle to the TEXTCEE who used to WRITE-LIKE-THIS. I still cannot associate him with Rawnold Macdonyall. I used to look up to Mc Greg Braid E. We used to freestyle on aim. Your verse had some flicker to it. The cadence displayed to me a glimmer of hope that not all is lost—Tranquil writing.



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Ultimately, it is always the photograph/pictures loss at the end of the day: when neither writer is inspired enough to manage to bring it to actualization…

But Rawn MD did more than enough to wax that ass up.



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