Wanderer 4-4 vs Junto 4-2 - JUNTO WINS

[Sharp]

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Rules

Due Dates:

• Verses are due Thursday, June 18th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are 24 hours

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• Minimum of 10, maximum of 16
• If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

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First to 5, win by at least two votes
Good luck!
@Wanderer @Junto

[Junto]

sup... 12 good?

[Wanderer]

Should be fine, definitely gonna need the ext.
New job, hectic week
That cool?

[Junto]

yea that's straight

[Wanderer]

Fuck an extension, just gonna key

I'm a fire breathing beast.. how you gon win? That's a conundrum
This nerds beats off to role playing games so you'll understand when this dragon's done jun
Pussy in a lions den. 4 W's? I'm about to go Hannibal
Safari's king of the park? Only if you tranquillised every other animal
Who the fuck are you? It won't be nothin to put you in a hearse
after I load that Calendar shooter ya moms'll be circling ya funeral in hers
Bitch all ya supporters'll get lit up like cigarette paper
Yeah I've heard jun's got shady followers.. even his silhouette's a hater
& Stop playin a cock like a flute. get one between the eyes ya fruit
I'll raise arms cos I'm homophobic you can call it a nazi salute
& I'll give you my Location if you wanna test me runnin' ya mouth
Try n Com'pass me & I'll bury pieces of you North, East, West & South
South

[Sharp]

@Junto

[Junto]

sorry...

You got no clout, that's it. I mean you nearly got knocked out by Alpo's shit
He focused on the hair & now ya got ya first real win!!!
...but back to the here & now I'm bout to scalp you bitch
Fuck ya fake ass retorts, you ain't a harden'd criminal in no shape or no sort
Not harden'd at all. 'cept how the fuzz do a lot to cover up ur face in them courts
I could restructure your style, feed you some concepts and help you improve in this
a Wand is powerful wit a wizard's direction... But obviously otherwise you ain't doin shit
U got trouble wit gas. Throw a cpl that catch but the rest of ya punches r trash
.....that tire pattern is why they'll be checkin your torso & my truck for a match
Nah let a few cement blocks do the trick - & all of ur blood get mopped up quick
See, the only body issue I got? is the newest edition featurin some US soccer chick
The best nickname is when it's real life that spawns it my friend.
& Wanderer's a great one... ur off the beaten path 1 week, then right back on it again

[Sn00p]

I'm a fire breathing beast.. how you gon win? That's a conundrum
This nerds beats off to role playing games so you'll understand when this dragon's done jun
^dun-jin but jun-to for me. so this doesn't work.
Pussy in a lions den. 4 W's? I'm about to go Hannibal
Safari's king of the park? Only if you tranquillised every other animal
^so far he's? okay, i can make that work. decent
Who the fuck are you? It won't be nothin to put you in a hearse
after I load that Calendar shooter ya moms'll be circling ya funeral in hers
^cal in da? oookay. have to stretch it but okay
Bitch all ya supporters'll get lit up like cigarette paper
Yeah I've heard jun's got shady followers.. even his silhouette's a hater
^mb i'm missing smth here. or is the connection just silhouette/shadow? hm.
& Stop playin a cock like a flute. get one between the eyes ya fruit
I'll raise arms cos I'm homophobic you can call it a nazi salute
^okay. i don't think i've actually ever seen it flipped like this. cool
& I'll give you my Location if you wanna test me runnin' ya mouth
Try n Com'pass me & I'll bury pieces of you North, East, West & South
^okay. idk. this might be played. cant remember seeing it tho. giving u the benefit of the doubt. solid closer

man. this was a pretty decent verse. u've been stepping it up lately. watch out for played shit tho. some of ur lines felt familiar even tho i'm not sure i've seen 'em.

vs.

You got no clout, that's it. I mean you nearly got knocked out by Alpo's shit
He focused on the hair & now ya got ya first real win!!!
...but back to the here & now I'm bout to scalp you bitch
^hm. i feel like u coulda executed this cleaner. decent
Fuck ya fake ass retorts, you ain't a harden'd criminal in no shape or no sort
Not harden'd at all. 'cept how the fuzz do a lot to cover up ur face in them courts
^okay, so the police cover his face in the court room cuz he's a snitch? but what's the wp or connection w/ harden'd then? sry. i thought about this for two solid minutes, but i don't get it
I could restructure your style, feed you some concepts and help you improve in this
a Wand is powerful wit a wizard's direction... But obviously otherwise you ain't doin shit
^uhm, i see where u're going but u maybe cud'a related to the wizard part in the setup more or smth? idk, felt a bit basic
U got trouble wit gas. Throw a cpl that catch but the rest of ya punches r trash
.....that tire pattern is why they'll be checkin your torso & my truck for a match
^nice execution. not bad
Nah let a few cement blocks do the trick - & all of ur blood get mopped up quick
See, the only body issue I got? is the newest edition featurin some US soccer chick
^aite
The best nickname is when it's real life that spawns it my friend.
& Wanderer's a great one... ur off the beaten path 1 week, then right back on it again
^beaten path as in he was beaten every other wk cuz his rec's 4-4? okay, that works. but is isn't the hardest-hitting line. still solid

i have jun's last 6 vs safari, raise arms & compass. this is pretty close. i can see ppl voting for either. i rly dunno who to vote for. jun felt fresher, but some of his lines were kinda basic. wand had better connection, but sometimes the wp felt forced and like i said, things cud be played. dont recall seeing em tho. so yea. i think i'll give it to jun in a close one. this was a cool read so props to both. and this is rly close. i can see ppl voting for wanderer too, based on their preference. good battle.
v/jun

[Greed]

I'm a fire breathing beast.. how you gon win? That's a conundrum
This nerds beats off to role playing games so you'll understand when this dragon's done jun
Expected more

Pussy in a lions den. 4 W's? I'm about to go Hannibal
Safari's king of the park? Only if you tranquillised every other animal
Weak connection

Who the fuck are you? It won't be nothin to put you in a hearse
after I load that Calendar shooter ya moms'll be circling ya funeral in hers
Ehh

Bitch all ya supporters'll get lit up like cigarette paper
Yeah I've heard jun's got shady followers.. even his silhouette's a hater
Lol

& Stop playin a cock like a flute. get one between the eyes ya fruit
I'll raise arms cos I'm homophobic you can call it a nazi salute
Weird setup

& I'll give you my Location if you wanna test me runnin' ya mouth
Try n Com'pass me & I'll bury pieces of you North, East, West & South
Solid




You got no clout, that's it. I mean you nearly got knocked out by Alpo's shit
He focused on the hair & now ya got ya first real win!!!
...but back to the here & now I'm bout to scalp you bitch
Ehh

Fuck ya fake ass retorts, you ain't a harden'd criminal in no shape or no sort
Not harden'd at all. 'cept how the fuzz do a lot to cover up ur face in them courts
Okay

I could restructure your style, feed you some concepts and help you improve in this
a Wand is powerful wit a wizard's direction... But obviously otherwise you ain't doin shit
Should have done more with this

U got trouble wit gas. Throw a cpl that catch but the rest of ya punches r trash
.....that tire pattern is why they'll be checkin your torso & my truck for a match
Okay. Didnt work all ways but okay line.

Nah let a few cement blocks do the trick - & all of ur blood get mopped up quick
See, the only body issue I got? is the newest edition featurin some US soccer chick
Okay

The best nickname is when it's real life that spawns it my friend.
& Wanderer's a great one... ur off the beaten path 1 week, then right back on it again
Ehh

I expected more from both of you.

V wand

Hella misses from both. Giving it to wand for slightly harder hitting connections.

[Tic]

Opener

Vs

Tire pattern and closer

Decent battle. Seen both come better than this. Junto did enough for the win here with that tire pattern bar, I liked that one.

Junto got it

[Allen Knight]

Fuck ya fake ass retorts, you ain't a harden'd criminal in no shape or no sort
Not harden'd at all. 'cept how the fuzz do a lot to cover up ur face in them courts
U got trouble wit gas. Throw a cpl that catch but the rest of ya punches r trash
.....that tire pattern is why they'll be checkin your torso & my truck for a match
Nah let a few cement blocks do the trick - & all of ur blood get mopped up quick
See, the only body issue I got? is the newest edition featurin some US soccer chic

Vs

Who the fuck are you? It won't be nothin to put you in a hearse
after I load that Calendar shooter ya moms'll be circling ya funeral in hers


V/jun, decent battle wand is gettin better but jun was more consistent here
he had 2 more solid quotes that were cool, i8 only quoted ones i thought were real good theres other that i coulda but props to both.

[Sharp]

I'm a fire breathing beast.. how you gon win? That's a conundrum
This nerds beats off to role playing games so you'll understand when this dragon's done jun
flip doesn't really work for me, never hear it pronounced 'jin'
Pussy in a lions den. 4 W's? I'm about to go Hannibal
Safari's king of the park? Only if you tranquillised every other animal
alright
Who the fuck are you? It won't be nothin to put you in a hearse
after I load that Calendar shooter ya moms'll be circling ya funeral in hers
calendar kinda works but the tail end of this punchline doesn't totally work for me... like the way Calendar was tied in wasn't totally effective imo
Bitch all ya supporters'll get lit up like cigarette paper
Yeah I've heard jun's got shady followers.. even his silhouette's a hater
simple but cool
& Stop playin a cock like a flute. get one between the eyes ya fruit
I'll raise arms cos I'm homophobic you can call it a nazi salute
works as a light jab but nothing really big here
& I'll give you my Location if you wanna test me runnin' ya mouth
Try n Com'pass me & I'll bury pieces of you North, East, West & South
South
I like it




You got no clout, that's it. I mean you nearly got knocked out by Alpo's shit
He focused on the hair & now ya got ya first real win!!!
...but back to the here & now I'm bout to scalp you bitch
nahh
Fuck ya fake ass retorts, you ain't a harden'd criminal in no shape or no sort
Not harden'd at all. 'cept how the fuzz do a lot to cover up ur face in them courts
cool idea but not too harsh delivery
I could restructure your style, feed you some concepts and help you improve in this
a Wand is powerful wit a wizard's direction... But obviously otherwise you ain't doin shit
cool
U got trouble wit gas. Throw a cpl that catch but the rest of ya punches r trash
.....that tire pattern is why they'll be checkin your torso & my truck for a match
ok
Nah let a few cement blocks do the trick - & all of ur blood get mopped up quick
See, the only body issue I got? is the newest edition featurin some US soccer chick
cool
The best nickname is when it's real life that spawns it my friend.
& Wanderer's a great one... ur off the beaten path 1 week, then right back on it again
cool



surprisingly close. Wanderer improved a lot and I thought he had it til I read the second half of jun's verse. Junto was a little more consistent but wanderer has a handle on it and tbh I wouldn't sleep on him again cause he keeps this up he will surprise

v/junto tho


4-1 junto

[El Muffin]

Junto
Opener ok
fuzz eh. Wordings well but eh
wand. Seen alot of these
tire pattern is dirty
body issue cool
closer dope


Wand
it's June toe. Mistake
safari I did this wp back on the day but ur flip is pretty cool
Calendar. Something about this I don't like. I can't even put my finger on it. Execution? This us a weird one
Shady is ok...check how much better it wud have been if u just put the word but befor even...with the comedic timing u already have w/ the ellipses. Promise it wud have been better
nazi salute decent I guess
I pronounce compass as come piss but I can see this working too. Nice

Jun last 6 vs safari n closer

V/ Jun by a quote

Cool shit

[fraze]

Originally Posted by Wanderer

I'm a fire breathing beast.. how you gon win? That's a conundrum
This nerds beats off to role playing games so you'll understand when this dragon's done jun
liked the name play didn't really like the rest
Pussy in a lions den. 4 W's? I'm about to go Hannibal
Safari's king of the park? Only if you tranquillised every other animal
this was coo
Who the fuck are you? It won't be nothin to put you in a hearse
after I load that Calendar shooter ya moms'll be circling ya funeral in hers
don't like the wording
Bitch all ya supporters'll get lit up like cigarette paper
Yeah I've heard jun's got shady followers.. even his silhouette's a hater
decent concept
& Stop playin a cock like a flute. get one between the eyes ya fruit
I'll raise arms cos I'm homophobic you can call it a nazi salute
no sir
& I'll give you my Location if you wanna test me runnin' ya mouth
Try n Com'pass me & I'll bury pieces of you North, East, West & South
ok i guess

Originally Posted by Junto

You got no clout, that's it. I mean you nearly got knocked out by Alpo's shit
He focused on the hair & now ya got ya first real win!!!
...but back to the here & now I'm bout to scalp you bitch
nice diss. cool
Fuck ya fake ass retorts, you ain't a harden'd criminal in no shape or no sort
Not harden'd at all. 'cept how the fuzz do a lot to cover up ur face in them courts
flow is there but the wording is bad
I could restructure your style, feed you some concepts and help you improve in this
a Wand is powerful wit a wizard's direction... But obviously otherwise you ain't doin shit
this was dope
U got trouble wit gas. Throw a cpl that catch but the rest of ya punches r trash
.....that tire pattern is why they'll be checkin your torso & my truck for a match
really weird wording. miss
Nah let a few cement blocks do the trick - & all of ur blood get mopped up quick
See, the only body issue I got? is the newest edition featurin some US soccer chick
ok
The best nickname is when it's real life that spawns it my friend.
& Wanderer's a great one... ur off the beaten path 1 week, then right back on it again
nice closer

Wander came with a nice verse, but I think Junto has him here on quotes. This was a nice read, props to both of you.

Vote: Junto

[Amen.]

Dungeon had potential, fell flat as is tho.

vs

wizards direction was good
tire pattern was solid

Junto go it