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Mad fucking dangerous.
Join Date: Jul 2013
Posts: 12,066
Battle Record: 40-19
Champed - AOWL Season 3
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Touche Guerrero: I liked the two name plays a bit, but the rest of the verse was weaker. Your wording and rhymes were solid enough, but the concepts weren't particularly creative or hard-hitting. The Final Destination and Killa Cam concepts have been done to death in text battling. The line about theMuzzl3's LinkedIn had potential but little creativity behind it.
Camp Bell: You put so much into rhyming that your content rarely lives up to it. That might work in swag-and-flow and Open Mic, but it won't in competitive battles. There really wasn't anything in this verse. The best line was a flip on your own name, which should be left for non-diss verses usually. The last line was the closest thing you had to a real hit, but your verse came across as a bit too nice. Get mean. Vote: Touche Guerrero
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