[TOPICAL] Trap vs. Split Eight - SPLIT WINS BY FORFEIT

Vulgar · 07-13-2013, 12:04 AM

trap - You have a charismatic quality about your writing in the form of a dull blade. I feel like your writing style can be sharpened, especially when it comes to conveying emotion. The makings of it are there, but the definition is hard to see (even though you are a crossfit guru) It was an enjoyable write, could've been stronger.

Split - Pretty funky, I like what you did with your word usage, using a different variety that I don't usually see, like for example 'prognosis' 'pestle' and 'assuage.' I felt like you were concentrating on making a firm point from the beginning about giving the theme 'retribution' a reverberating effect. Reading it wasn't labored and I was satisfied with your use of the language.

My vote goes to Split because it held me for longer. I was engaged.

Cool work gents.

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07-13-2013, 12:04 AM	#10
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	trap - You have a charismatic quality about your writing in the form of a dull blade. I feel like your writing style can be sharpened, especially when it comes to conveying emotion. The makings of it are there, but the definition is hard to see (even though you are a crossfit guru) It was an enjoyable write, could've been stronger. Split - Pretty funky, I like what you did with your word usage, using a different variety that I don't usually see, like for example 'prognosis' 'pestle' and 'assuage.' I felt like you were concentrating on making a firm point from the beginning about giving the theme 'retribution' a reverberating effect. Reading it wasn't labored and I was satisfied with your use of the language. My vote goes to Split because it held me for longer. I was engaged. Cool work gents.