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Vulgar · 07-11-2013, 08:42 PM

Moar of a concerto effort from you. Showing us your weapons, but also showing us the sensitivity of 3D printing censor. Sensory language as well. Peppering the page with something containing peppermint, and the customary blitzkrieg of multi syllabic pointers. The 12 handed clock indicates a rise in interrelated topics: pharmaceuticals, perception, government, identity. Interesting stuff.

somewhere gotham recalls was once a gleaming oasis
housing creative reform upon a seasonal basis
^There were levels to this which I liked thinking about. Not the movie version of Gotham but the comic book one makes this a more tender concept. There could also be subtle wordplay for invasive vegetation in Gotham, man vs. nature. Or man vs. human nature.

lost love and sacrificed a treasure for greed
to spend a single night inside of heaven's physique
followers are swallowers, its better to lead
everybody off that cliff into a sedative sea
^Second line was crisp. Second bar was ether. I paused while reading to raise my eyebrows and so forth.

All in all, you are meticulous when it comes to treating the gene pool of your central idea. One might picture you focused on an examination table, splicing concepts that used to be in limbo and creating associative uses for each. I'd use the word "cerebral" but I'd rather use Cerebro. Shout outs to Magneto for sabotaging it.

but it all falls down like autumn leaves. art is a breeze
i've only tried to warn of what i've already seen
but it all falls down like autumn leaves..
^The ending was a bit unsteady, but not a let down.

Nice write, Black.

Keep doing you

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07-11-2013, 08:42 PM	#13
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Moar of a concerto effort from you. Showing us your weapons, but also showing us the sensitivity of 3D printing censor. Sensory language as well. Peppering the page with something containing peppermint, and the customary blitzkrieg of multi syllabic pointers. The 12 handed clock indicates a rise in interrelated topics: pharmaceuticals, perception, government, identity. Interesting stuff. somewhere gotham recalls was once a gleaming oasis housing creative reform upon a seasonal basis ^There were levels to this which I liked thinking about. Not the movie version of Gotham but the comic book one makes this a more tender concept. There could also be subtle wordplay for invasive vegetation in Gotham, man vs. nature. Or man vs. human nature. lost love and sacrificed a treasure for greed to spend a single night inside of heaven's physique followers are swallowers, its better to lead everybody off that cliff into a sedative sea ^Second line was crisp. Second bar was ether. I paused while reading to raise my eyebrows and so forth. All in all, you are meticulous when it comes to treating the gene pool of your central idea. One might picture you focused on an examination table, splicing concepts that used to be in limbo and creating associative uses for each. I'd use the word "cerebral" but I'd rather use Cerebro. Shout outs to Magneto for sabotaging it. but it all falls down like autumn leaves. art is a breeze i've only tried to warn of what i've already seen but it all falls down like autumn leaves.. ^The ending was a bit unsteady, but not a let down. Nice write, Black. Keep doing you