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02-11-2016, 04:49 PM
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Posts: 863
Battle Record: 23-19
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Fracture.
Opener too complicated. Paper line is ok, but bark is a stretch to get to a line about paper manufacturing. I don't get piru line. Thot line is tight. Heimlich is decent but the rhyme is awkward. Closer is fire. Subtle but hard. AK I guess Anthony is Bags's name? Cainster was a weird read, needed a couple looks. Gothic line is fire. Yule Log woulda been better around Christmas but still funny. Sister Abigail line is fire. Lieutenant line is funny. In a battle of 2 lines I liked vs 2 lines plus some decent ones, I gotta go with AK. Fracture had a couple misses that I couldn't overlook. Vote -- Allen Knight
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02-11-2016, 06:21 PM
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Super Senior Member
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 7,420
Battle Record: 70-25
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Frac
I liked the illustrator line thought it was dope Allen I'm not a fan of some of the wordplay BUT gothic was great and the sister line was too I got allen
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