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Allen Knight Vs Fracture - (AK wins)
NBL Season 9 Due TUESDAY Minimum - 10 lines Max - 20 lines Line limit can increase if both agree NO biting NO swaying NO feeding NO recycling You must check in Don't edit after your opponent has posted 2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in Don't be an idiot You MUST vote on all battles & post your links in the Voting Thread Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle Agree on a line limit May God have mercy on your souls @Allen Knight @Fracture |
Let do 12 then man
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ight 12, will clean up this thread.
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Another apprentice getting testy questioning me
Ur a big easy target. This is Isis at Mardi Gras, with no interest in beads Allen knight? Night Allen. This faggots backwards Ur all bark. So u know I'm making paper when I chop u up to have u manufactured Dudes shooook. Nervous. Unable to express his talent The piru sent to kill Biggie had less blood pressure than Allen How can u beat me? Ur sloppy.. Concepts just falter Even when u put a thot into a bar.. she just leaves with someone not as awkward Frac is the nicest at this, ur just aiight & that's it Plus ur a choke artist. Allen could only make a name illustrating heimlich pamphlets Im a starter, Allens a bench story that made Forrest Gump thrilling And he knows he'll go out like a losing samurai, it's his gut feeling. |
stop calling out bags w/ ur weird ass obsession w/ him cuz
he would scorch u ina battle, that plan is tired fag u try to Marc Anthony he'd light u up & leave this 'Man on fire' 9milly aimed at ya organs pussy, shells hittin ur core now that Canister ur insides up till everything stored in ur body pours out ur slut fucks black guys 24/7, at random parks railin it only reason that ass Gothic is cuz she been filled w/ dark elements im boding u into retirement, u'll get wrecked w/ ratchets Yule Log off forever cuz i burnt u alive till ya fuckin careers left in ashes ur moms sucks me off before i smash, im violent diggin her that slut kisses the head before i slam it like Bray Wyatt's finisher rob ur crib w/ a uzi, take the safe off ya table quick snatch all the Lieutenant & leave a hole in u the size of a Naval Ship |
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The bray Wyatt line alone won this battle IMO Allen had a lot of bad wordplay but frac just had a lot of bad wording The thot/thought shit was just atrocious V/knight |
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That bray Wyatt line was classic
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Fracture.
Opener too complicated. Paper line is ok, but bark is a stretch to get to a line about paper manufacturing. I don't get piru line. Thot line is tight. Heimlich is decent but the rhyme is awkward. Closer is fire. Subtle but hard. AK I guess Anthony is Bags's name? Cainster was a weird read, needed a couple looks. Gothic line is fire. Yule Log woulda been better around Christmas but still funny. Sister Abigail line is fire. Lieutenant line is funny. In a battle of 2 lines I liked vs 2 lines plus some decent ones, I gotta go with AK. Fracture had a couple misses that I couldn't overlook. Vote -- Allen Knight |
Frac
I liked the illustrator line thought it was dope Allen I'm not a fan of some of the wordplay BUT gothic was great and the sister line was too I got allen |
The blood pressure and gothic lines alone made this worth reading. Good job, men.
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Another apprentice getting testy questioning me
Ur a big easy target. This is Isis at Mardi Gras, with no interest in beads I LIKED THIS Allen knight? Night Allen. This faggots backwards Ur all bark. So u know I'm making paper when I chop u up to have u manufactured NICE CONCEPTUALLY, BUT THE EXECUTION OF THE COULDA BEEN HARSHER Dudes shooook. Nervous. Unable to express his talent The piru sent to kill Biggie had less blood pressure than Allen THIS IS NICE How can u beat me? Ur sloppy.. Concepts just falter Even when u put a thot into a bar.. she just leaves with someone not as awkward THIS WAS DOPE IMO Frac is the nicest at this, ur just aiight & that's it Plus ur a choke artist. Allen could only make a name illustrating heimlich pamphlets IVE SEEN THIS CHOKE ANGLE DONE A BIT TOO MUCH Im a starter, Allens a bench story that made Forrest Gump thrilling And he knows he'll go out like a losing samurai, it's his gut feeling. IVE SEEN THIS SAMURAI/GUT FEELING A BIT TOO MUCH ALSO. HARD TO AWARD PTS HERE VS he would scorch u ina battle, that plan is tired fag u try to Marc Anthony he'd light u up & leave this 'Man on fire' ALRIGHT 9milly aimed at ya organs pussy, shells hittin ur core now that Canister ur insides up till everything stored in ur body pours out OK, COULDA EXECUTED THAT CAN FLIP A LIL BETTER ur slut fucks black guys 24/7, at random parks railin it only reason that ass Gothic is cuz she been filled w/ dark elements THIS WAS LOLS im boding u into retirement, u'll get wrecked w/ ratchets Yule Log off forever cuz i burnt u alive till ya fuckin careers left in ashes THIS WAS GOOD ur moms sucks me off before i smash, im violent diggin her that slut kisses the head before i slam it like Bray Wyatt's finisher YIKES.. rob ur crib w/ a uzi, take the safe off ya table quick snatch all the Lieutenant & leave a hole in u the size of a Naval Ship NAH. I DIDN'T LIKE HOW U DID THIS. BOTCHED CONCEPT IMO verdict- Good battle. Frac, I liked ur creativity for the most part. But ur last two concepts, I've seen done a few times. But your wording and execution was much better. AK, you was consistent. Only bar I didn't like was your closer. Vote-ak on consistency |
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Honestly didn't think either ran away with it Due to both lacking that killer dagger. Neither verse was bad, but neither was great either. I liked the thought into a bar line the most, but Allen was more consistent and more polished on a per line basis
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