Round One: Chat and Prediction

[Cimmerian]

Originally Posted by Pharaohs Army

Bringing this up as a chat item, a perspective from a relatively green topical voter/writer

I've read the @MMLP vs. @PentUp verses a couple times each.

Was about to vote, but I truly don't feel like I can contribute a vote. I am leaning slightly towards one, but...I'm not bein a dick here; it's just not my "thing", but I will keep dipping my foot in the water.

As a man of words I'm having trouble expressing what I wanna express here, let alone attempting to express a "vote explanation", lol.

Obviously some good metaphors in both.. And good rhyming.. Just... too thick. Too heavy..

I guess it's personal stylistic preference.
You guys are too good and rhymie for your own good... i.e. I enjoy super-rhymie stuff, but (TO ME) it seems to work better if it's bragging or violence or humor or battlez... as opposed to a serious topic or story, where one should strive to be concise despite one's instinct to rhymerhymerhyme.
for example MMLP is a dope writer(his verse in AOWL impressed me big-time), but tbh I view his first-round story here as over-rhymed and kinda shitty. Meaning it's superfluous.
and PentUp... too thick bro. Redundant a few times. BUT I MEAN ITS GOOD WRITING, BOTH OF THEM

So yeah I'm 0-6 and don't have too much credibility, but I Hope ya'll in this terny understand what I'm trying to convey here.
Like I said. Dip feets in water. *Back to keying jarbled mania, I guess*. lol.

&thanks to voters-- in my first round vs. Witty-- for the constructive tips and breakdowns. I realize technicality is usually my downfall in anything I do... Few days ago I was taking my verse apart and trying like 5 different ways to display it. Frustrating tbh. Ended up just going with my original format. Basically I'll take L as long as people understand that limitless kinda rhymes with fingertips.
Ironically, in most things I write I put technicality above all else. Which I guess we could say is a big problem, since I often fail@'showing' others. It's been years of a struggle lemme tellya.

I coulda just said I didn't vote so I could "save votes" for ppl who need them.
P.S. @Adonis^ I haven't crunched the numbers but I have a feeling that mathematically voters who are "late to the party" might be left in the cold and could be killed by the voting rule, particuarly if there are a bunch of sweeps. So plz take that into account before you actually punish anyone by the letter of the law.. I understand it's a fine line though-- not voting(lazy) VS. not voting early(and being screwed).

GL all in next rds

@Pharaohs Army

You definitely should vote and share your thoughts. If people get annoyed by them, it's their problem.

I voted on the first three battles that were open. I didn't have a chance to read yours. I did this morning. My suggestions are:

1. Try to strive to rhyme more. I understand that you are of the mind that "rhyming" is best suited for violence and battling. But that's a minority view. You are essentially ignoring the library of rap music that doesn't deal with those topics.

2. Try to work on phrasing. For example, you wrote:

"but i think i'll be Sedentary- until i reach the cemetery."

The idea is great for the topic. Could it be improved by revising it to "sedentary until the cemetery?" I think so.

Anyway, I hope this helps.

Keep writing.

Cimm.