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11-27-2014, 03:10 PM
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So much shit to elevate on here, there was almost no flow to this at all for starters. You need to elevate on your multisyllabic rhyming as well, along with your internal rhymes. Next piece needs to be longer as well, and with an actusl concept. Overall this was not that good at all, but all it takes is elevation. Stay up
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