Chilling Like The Great Gatsby

Mr. J · 11-06-2014, 07:25 PM

Take a walk with pain, moderate pain
something I often blame for my topics range
nauseous ways, I lean back, rock away
with a migraine making it hard to contemplate
I cough, I praise higher powers for the awkward day
for the chalk that's lain... then I walk away
another body to the list that's been shot today
if you mocking game hunger pains & mocking jay's
take the same background that a stalker takes
put life in a choke hold, a gram in a whole bowl
turn a angel to dust if you tell me it won't snow
ease up Romo...spinal bifida for all you homo's
keep your eyes shut and keep your nose closed
Hello moto, get a razor to your side like old folks
with old phones, I lay it down for those who don't know
I deliver tri-weekly while most of y'all try weekly..
got a style that you can't just buy freely...
tailored wear, leaving me a tinkered soldier...
spy and think it over, a banana in a freakin' holster
so if you slip up even hiccup I bring exposure..
bring the mink, the colder it gets.. you'll blink, it's over
I add sauce to nuggets then floss like fug it...
I don't need a topic I could just talk, you'll love it..
don't need the face to match or the basic raps
just a mic and beat...nah I don't even play with that
childs play & a waste of breath...

Vulgar · 11-06-2014, 09:51 PM

Funky for what it was. I always like your titles because they're a small view into the way you perceive the world, if that rings true, lol. The verse wasn't a bore either, I read it from start to finish without any distractions. Overall cool.

Mr. J · 11-08-2014, 02:39 PM

totally agree with you...it is a window with the blinds shut
but rips through the fabric and air seeping through broken glass

Mr. J · 11-15-2014, 09:48 PM

With a snowstorm passing through

Geno · 11-16-2014, 04:00 PM

Pretty classic 12 piece. Cant complain.

Exis · 11-17-2014, 09:50 AM

take the same background that a stalker takes
put life in a choke hold, a gram in a whole bowl
turn a angel to dust if you tell me it won't snow
ease up Romo...spinal bifida for all you homo's
keep your eyes shut and keep your nose closed

^^Liked it.

Enjoyable read...had some nice multies, content was cool overall...not alot to say other than the fact I thought it was a tight little piece man.

Stay upwards.

Mr. J · 11-24-2014, 01:24 PM

Thanks breh 'precitate it

E Tha Real · 11-26-2014, 01:54 PM

Title is polarizing. Nice flow very spittable. Could transition this piece easily to audio. Like your style, keep it up sir.

11-06-2014, 07:25 PM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Chilling Like The Great Gatsby Take a walk with pain, moderate pain something I often blame for my topics range nauseous ways, I lean back, rock away with a migraine making it hard to contemplate I cough, I praise higher powers for the awkward day for the chalk that's lain... then I walk away another body to the list that's been shot today if you mocking game hunger pains & mocking jay's take the same background that a stalker takes put life in a choke hold, a gram in a whole bowl turn a angel to dust if you tell me it won't snow ease up Romo...spinal bifida for all you homo's keep your eyes shut and keep your nose closed Hello moto, get a razor to your side like old folks with old phones, I lay it down for those who don't know I deliver tri-weekly while most of y'all try weekly.. got a style that you can't just buy freely... tailored wear, leaving me a tinkered soldier... spy and think it over, a banana in a freakin' holster so if you slip up even hiccup I bring exposure.. bring the mink, the colder it gets.. you'll blink, it's over I add sauce to nuggets then floss like fug it... I don't need a topic I could just talk, you'll love it.. don't need the face to match or the basic raps just a mic and beat...nah I don't even play with that childs play & a waste of breath... __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

11-08-2014, 02:39 PM	#3
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	totally agree with you...it is a window with the blinds shut but rips through the fabric and air seeping through broken glass __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

11-15-2014, 09:48 PM	#4
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	With a snowstorm passing through __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

11-16-2014, 04:00 PM	#5
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Pretty classic 12 piece. Cant complain. __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

11-24-2014, 01:24 PM	#7
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Thanks breh 'precitate it __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

11-06-2014, 09:51 PM	#2
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Funky for what it was. I always like your titles because they're a small view into the way you perceive the world, if that rings true, lol. The verse wasn't a bore either, I read it from start to finish without any distractions. Overall cool.

11-17-2014, 09:50 AM	#6
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	take the same background that a stalker takes put life in a choke hold, a gram in a whole bowl turn a angel to dust if you tell me it won't snow ease up Romo...spinal bifida for all you homo's keep your eyes shut and keep your nose closed ^^Liked it. Enjoyable read...had some nice multies, content was cool overall...not alot to say other than the fact I thought it was a tight little piece man. Stay upwards.

11-26-2014, 01:54 PM	#8
E Tha Real yes really Join Date: Nov 2014 Location: NC Posts: 362 Battle Record: 7-9 Rep Power: 6054895	Title is polarizing. Nice flow very spittable. Could transition this piece easily to audio. Like your style, keep it up sir.

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