Lyfzin Shambles vs Camp Bell (S&F) [Camp Bell WINS]

Notebook · 08-27-2014, 03:31 PM

Shambles:

With raps I continue to excel.. I do creativity well
And listen facts is u getting Cracked, for having No Liberty................................ Bell.
Precision is swell, aim perfected cave ya chest in...
Basic segment of rage with weapons.................. displayed on this slain contestant.

^ Nice opener! The multi-work and transitioning rhyme schemes are awesome, which is what I like to see almost ABUSED in swag-and-flow battles, haha. That "No Liberty" punch was ill, too.

Angry message...
I'm a problem.. He ain't getting no fire started, with his endeavor
Now it's time..
I show 'Camp Out of his mind'.. next time try 'visioning rubbing two sticks together'.

^ Wasn't feeling this section too much. Felt forced IMO. I saw the connection you were trying to make, though. Some re-wording and it could have been something dope.

Maybe that's what's better for this dick to b clever... I bring this guy danger
......................................... I give this fucking peasant sudden death like a tie breaker.

^ Clever simile. I dig it.

Trust me for a second... This is something u mustn't get in..
Break his damn leg............ I'm Giving Campaign.... like he was Running for Election.

^ Decently executed. Once again, a tweaking of the wording and this would've hit so much harder. Still a pretty cool bar, though.

Camp Bell:

blood pumps through my cryo'd heart, son my typos might go hard
got my stripes twice by snatching the life of pi from that tigers jaws
you a vet on the netcee wave? lets see, jet ski race with tritons drawn
i'll end lyfe at the finish line, thats a dead sea grave in poseidons lawn

^ Explosive opening. I'm feeling the complex rhyme schemes...it gives a very interesting, but enjoyable edge. Very nice.

visually, the chemistry in my ability to enter keys is too hype for words
literally, lyfez blue sky was nice an calm til walter white met heisenberg
we in the dungeon wit double dragons, gambling trouble, ya dice is short
i brought hammer and spike to war, bludgeoned action, you'll die for sure

^ Not much to say besides DOPE shit. Complex concepts weaved together with off-kilter rhyme-patterns. Makes for a great read...

Vote: Camp. His verse was more "Swag-and-Flow"-ish, overall. Sham seemed to take a Text Battle approach, rather than the latter. But, besides that, Camp's verse was quite an enjoyable read and sparked my interest a lot more.

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08-27-2014, 03:31 PM	#1
Notebook fanlink.to/Notebook Join Date: Feb 2014 Location: Hell. Posts: 49 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 0	Shambles: With raps I continue to excel.. I do creativity well And listen facts is u getting Cracked, for having No Liberty................................ Bell. Precision is swell, aim perfected cave ya chest in... Basic segment of rage with weapons.................. displayed on this slain contestant. ^ Nice opener! The multi-work and transitioning rhyme schemes are awesome, which is what I like to see almost ABUSED in swag-and-flow battles, haha. That "No Liberty" punch was ill, too. Angry message... I'm a problem.. He ain't getting no fire started, with his endeavor Now it's time.. I show 'Camp Out of his mind'.. next time try 'visioning rubbing two sticks together'. ^ Wasn't feeling this section too much. Felt forced IMO. I saw the connection you were trying to make, though. Some re-wording and it could have been something dope. Maybe that's what's better for this dick to b clever... I bring this guy danger ......................................... I give this fucking peasant sudden death like a tie breaker. ^ Clever simile. I dig it. Trust me for a second... This is something u mustn't get in.. Break his damn leg............ I'm Giving Campaign.... like he was Running for Election. ^ Decently executed. Once again, a tweaking of the wording and this would've hit so much harder. Still a pretty cool bar, though. Camp Bell: blood pumps through my cryo'd heart, son my typos might go hard got my stripes twice by snatching the life of pi from that tigers jaws you a vet on the netcee wave? lets see, jet ski race with tritons drawn i'll end lyfe at the finish line, thats a dead sea grave in poseidons lawn ^ Explosive opening. I'm feeling the complex rhyme schemes...it gives a very interesting, but enjoyable edge. Very nice. visually, the chemistry in my ability to enter keys is too hype for words literally, lyfez blue sky was nice an calm til walter white met heisenberg we in the dungeon wit double dragons, gambling trouble, ya dice is short i brought hammer and spike to war, bludgeoned action, you'll die for sure ^ Not much to say besides DOPE shit. Complex concepts weaved together with off-kilter rhyme-patterns. Makes for a great read... Vote: Camp. His verse was more "Swag-and-Flow"-ish, overall. Sham seemed to take a Text Battle approach, rather than the latter. But, besides that, Camp's verse was quite an enjoyable read and sparked my interest a lot more.