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07-27-2014, 09:31 AM
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obsessed
Join Date: Nov 2013
Location: fucka idiyote
Posts: 5,709
Battle Record: Faggot-1
Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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A lot of things to pinpoint. By rhyming, the assonance doesn't make it seem you have a grasp in words. I agree with p, its just a lot of words were input in the wrong spot it seemed. And it seemed lazy. If a more skilled writer were to do this it would be done better, even with the same syllabic count. It just lacks substance and the words in-between words don't support the scheme. Adjective and verbs maximize this and you tend to either cutthroat it or let it go. It seems lackluster. Idk. Not very good.
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