Week 13: 11. Zenland (1-1) vs. 12. cyph her (0-1) \\ cyph her wins 7-1

e11even · 05-26-2014, 03:01 AM

cyph her- I'm not sure how I feel about this. I like this in certain parts. The overall piece felt incomplete, like an excerpt. I liked the metaphors for the two yous and the connections, with memories interwoven. I feel like a better plan on that would have had greater results. Not sure if I know what I'm saying. Good job tho.

Zen- LOL on that ending. That last stanza felt like a mood killer. if theis was real life, OK thats what really happened. But it felt like some kinda funky B-List druggy movie with an almost cliche ending. I dug the first half a lot. A lot of potential there. Welcome back bro. Good job overall.

MVGT Zen for his first half grabbing my attention so well, even if the ending fell off a little.

05-26-2014, 03:01 AM	#11
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	cyph her- I'm not sure how I feel about this. I like this in certain parts. The overall piece felt incomplete, like an excerpt. I liked the metaphors for the two yous and the connections, with memories interwoven. I feel like a better plan on that would have had greater results. Not sure if I know what I'm saying. Good job tho. Zen- LOL on that ending. That last stanza felt like a mood killer. if theis was real life, OK thats what really happened. But it felt like some kinda funky B-List druggy movie with an almost cliche ending. I dug the first half a lot. A lot of potential there. Welcome back bro. Good job overall. MVGT Zen for his first half grabbing my attention so well, even if the ending fell off a little. __________________ Ahem.

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