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Razor-thin derision
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They descended with purpose, perfected entities asserting dense
Molecular murmurs, sure disturbance to our Earth as it rests in its purest Convection is what stirred the very vessel they herded, we heard that They were the messages, their words will be dissected to be learned They weren't expected but emerged in a blaze, the scene was gorgeous They became the leading forces and our deities of worship Very patient with the orders were these Angels in Gomorrah ^Buttery flow. Each unlatching patterns, keep the master thesis out the masses reach And keep it secret as they're latching leashes on this passive species ^Fire. I liked this, even though the approach was a bit played. You're coming into your own as a writer; make sure you put original spins on this breed of Atlantian alternate history culture, because it's very easy to fall into the typical category. I'd recommend listening to some Masta Buildas on YouTube to gauge where no one has been before. There are so many areas you can get into and spit some philosophy on. Keep writing though, you are getting tough at this. Keep doing you |
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