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The Book of Enoch
The Book of Enoch http://www.creationoutreach.com/site...g.w560h716.jpg They descended with purpose, perfected entities asserting dense Molecular murmurs, sure disturbance to our Earth as it rests in its purest Convection is what stirred the very vessel they herded, we heard that They were the messages, their words will be dissected to be learned They weren't expected but emerged in a blaze, the scene was gorgeous They became the leading forces and our deities of worship Very patient with the orders were these Angels in Gomorrah Civilizations reigning global, they were stationed in Atlantis Scribing myriads of monuments in writing old as Sanskrit Taught of spirits, sin, and consciousness, it's ominous complexity Appearing in the darkness as they watched us over centuries Build pyramids over aquifers to harvest in the energy Sincere were their accomplishments, our eyes were opened endlessly A year since they'd been brought to us, horizons darken destiny Their tyranny and slaughter was appearing in our hardships It was clearer in it's parts then the veneer that smeared the parchment Blending fear into our hearts as if our fury was the target Since it's clear that they had lost us they adhere to an apocalypse Endearment to our daughters 'till their fathering the cradle Make superior exalted kin, nostalgia for the ages, It's the call to cages Homage paid to Amadeus, faulted, faded malt, decay of falling angels............ Saw the rising of the seas and all the slaughtered lives uprooted As they're lying with our wives beneath us thriving in the lost Bermuda Newly astral men had planted seeds which will establish family trees To lead this land completely, the advantages of having seen And understanding things the modern man just can't compete with Each unlatching patterns, keep the master thesis out the masses reach And keep it secret as they're latching leashes on this passive species Pleading, after these disasters ceased the planted seeds begin to grow As the citizens explode with growth the clinics paved insane traits Crafting instruments of stone to clone as mimics to our brainwaves To create slaves the safe way... Producing laws thats flawed with tricks They introduced economy and fathered it, locked them into jobs like prison Politics had spawned and risen positive, accomplished it, a conquered mission Onwards competence had limits, knowledge of our God's existence Is abolished, lives in all the hidden Nephalem, evolved with wisdom Destined Suns live fatherless, The Messengers were called and left They left us blessed and encouraged, wrestling death, and with fervour Their vessel is cresting the surface rising upwards, they're ascending with purpose |
Bump, this ones good. You should read it.
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I read it.
Homage paid to Amadeus, faulted, faded malt, decay of falling angels............ ^This was cool. As a whole this piece was a bit on the vague side but what evs. The opening lines were smooth as well. |
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Very creative idea here. From my understanding of the book of Enoch, it's an (often) inadmissible chapter in the Old Testament. It tells of a prophet who was granted permission to see the full glory of Heaven, lol. The chapter further went to tell of the assistance of the Sons of God (Angels) to mankind, resulting in a whole bunch of civilized advancement. Somewhere along the line, these Sons of God mated with the daughters of man resulting in unholy abominations call Nephilim...lol...a very colorful chapter indeed. I dug what u did with the crux of that story. Its clear what you were trying to do according to passages like these: Quote:
Flow was a little uneven imo. Some of the rhymings were a bit stretch (gorgeous/worship). But all in all, this was an enjoyable piece, my dude. salute. |
scratch that gorgeous/worship comment. I see, now, it was a call back thing - 'merged in/worship.
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They descended with purpose, perfected entities asserting dense
Molecular murmurs, sure disturbance to our Earth as it rests in its purest Convection is what stirred the very vessel they herded, we heard that They were the messages, their words will be dissected to be learned They weren't expected but emerged in a blaze, the scene was gorgeous They became the leading forces and our deities of worship Very patient with the orders were these Angels in Gomorrah ^Buttery flow. Each unlatching patterns, keep the master thesis out the masses reach And keep it secret as they're latching leashes on this passive species ^Fire. I liked this, even though the approach was a bit played. You're coming into your own as a writer; make sure you put original spins on this breed of Atlantian alternate history culture, because it's very easy to fall into the typical category. I'd recommend listening to some Masta Buildas on YouTube to gauge where no one has been before. There are so many areas you can get into and spit some philosophy on. Keep writing though, you are getting tough at this. Keep doing you |
Saw the rising of the seas and all the slaughtered lives uprooted
As they're lying with our wives beneath us thriving in the lost Bermuda Newly astral men had planted seeds which will establish family trees To lead this land completely, the advantages of having seen Lost Bermuda was just placed nice and cozy there to satisfy my needs. You write with a certain prose, that can be adjusted in certain areas of writing to exponentially amplify your current itinerary. |
They descended with purpose, perfected entities asserting dense
Molecular murmurs, sure disturbance to our Earth as it rests in its purest Convection is what stirred the very vessel they herded, we heard that They were the messages, their words will be dissected to be learned They weren't expected but emerged in a blaze, the scene was gorgeous They became the leading forces and our deities of worship Great openener. Make superior exalted kin, nostalgia for the ages, It's the call to cages Homage paid to Amadeus, faulted, faded malt, decay of falling angels............ Saw the rising of the seas and all the slaughtered lives uprooted As they're lying with our wives beneath us thriving in the lost Bermuda Fire. Quote:
I haven't read the book of Enoch personally, but I've always had a fascination with angels. I have read the Revelations, though. So yeah, this was an interesting read, and your interpretation of events a joy to engage in. Lots of excellent imagery. Good job on the multis and the interesting rhyme scheme. The overall tone of this piece was informative, yet compelling. Great read, mate. Look forward to more from you. |
The topic of this piece was "First man to meet an alien" and I wrote on an abstract interpretation of The Book of Enoch which told of the arrival of visitors from the skies and the eventual fall of angels who would land and take women, mate with them, and form cross a cross breed known as the nephilim. My take on it was that the half human/half alien bloodline grew into the illuminati. The people who gave the egyptians their technology and crafted the pyramids kinda thing and they still survive with the same beliefs.
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