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12-05-2013, 06:14 PM
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This was well written and had good structure and flow
"In his seat, speaking with a Doc, his topics field logistics Says there's harpies in the heart of me, we seek then to reveal the bitches" I liked how you used the real meaning of the word harpy "that which snatches" or "to snatch"
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